This is how you turn into a psychopath

I stand beside her still gawking over her velvety lips, the silky hairs and creamy milky face so innocent and pure. It just feels so good to destroy that purity that innocence. The butcher knife still is in the grasp of my right hand. The blood so fresh, so red still covers its half skin as the tip slowly peels away some of the red liquid tip by tip. I look at the window; its two storey high no problem for me. I exit her flat through the pipeline. 

                                                                              I don't care what you think of me. Hysterical, psychopath, murderer but that just doesn't bother me. It bugs me off sometime that people can really comment on something they have never done in life. F**k it people are ruthless, brutal and worthless piece of s**t. Especially these girls. If god gave freedom to every being on this universe, monsters would roam free gobbling everything in their way. This is the way for women, the rights they earned were too was because of help of men. But what became of them. You go to girl in bus and try to talk to her casually. You dont know she has a boyfriend. Its only a talk for you to kill your time. For her, its an once-in-a-lifetime opportunity to get mass attention. She screams, she begs at top of her voice. He tried to touch me here there, I protested. F**k the conductor, he throws you off the bus but that's not the end of it. Next day your face is in every newspaper with labels such as "Are the girls now not safe even in Public Places". No one hears your story. No one heard mine. Then those rugged face, corrupt, a******s the so-called protectors of law arrive at your house and take you to police station in every insulting way possible. I....they then have their time with you. The girls sentence is way too nuclear for the long long explanation by you. F**K!F**K!F**K! your mom had slit her wrists with a knife the knife you carry for your revenge. Your dad is in mental hospital due to the rubbish and bullshit cusses said by the people-the f*****g delirious fool, who take everything for granted. F**K! you have no life now. Only one thing remains.

                                                                                                                                                        I look at the house one last time. I killed the b***h. And i had removed every evidence possible. I had to. Her one word was enough to label me a molester but i had to provide evidence against the same. The b***h had paid the prize. Soon others will have to pay the same. Here i Come city. Save yourself if you can. 

Author's Note

this is my first time writing any thing creative so please ignore the grammar mistakes. Any and i mean any critical review on the plot is welcomed be it good or bad.

Reviews

[DiskartetHaraya]

Hi. Constructive review here.

1. I'm not convinced the character is a psychopath. Sure, he seems intelligent, is careful, and was capable of killing someone. But based on his motivations (i.e. retaliations against his life's ruin), he doesn't stand out from any other person who bears grudges and have extreme revenge.

2. Yes, the title is "This is how you turn into a psychopath". At this point, I'm not expecting the character to have a murder count or outstanding criminal record. But at this point, again, he is simply a murderer. If he turned into a psychopath, it would only be in the eyes of society. The story can continue with him killing just this one girl, for it ended with him only saying that other girls also had to pay, he didn't actually do it.

3. I want to hear from you. What was your project? Were you being satirical? For instance, the rant against (fake) feminism is a little present here, but I'm fairly sure the character currently just wants equality and justice, yet eaten by grudge. (The girl's character is flat, I have mixed feelings about that, but considering the narrator is mad, I'm expecting the descriptions of other characters to be colored with his emotions/bias).

Minor comments:
Avoid too much ranting. Avoid all caps.
My fave line- "No one hears your story. No one heard mine." Packed with emotion and sums up the character.

[Shubham Sharma]

Ah. I felt so good to actually see a review of my story.
Surely DiskartetHaraya your review was fantastic. It really ridicules the loop holes and gaps along with all the errors of my story and yet it has a pro-founding effect on my heart. Surely i would write a sequel to this story and i will write well.

[DiskartetHaraya]

Great; that is the spirit! Never be intimidated by areas of improvement. They're meant to empower. You can do it.

[S. Elice]

It is so clear it seems to cover me and drown me in the words. Beautiful piece, you did an outstanding job! I wish I had the creativity in me t write like this.
~S. E.