Sins of the Flesh

I was bored in a class were I was doing nothing so I decide to write a poem about the seven deadly sins. It doesn't resemble it anymore, but the inspiration was from the sins.

Wrongfully taste the fruit,

And gorge yourself on it’s sweet nectar.

Keep it locked away so no one can taste,

“Nobody would dare to steal from you.” you say this with pride.

“They all envy you and your greatness!”

You coax this to your mirror on a daily basis.

“Gloat.” you tell yourself.

“ You deserve to be worshipped.”

You smile with satisfaction,

You take great pride with yourself.

What you don’t realize is that,

While you are gloating, in your sloth like state of pride,

The wrongfully desired sits in the shadow,

Waiting for the perfect time to avenge.

Reviews

[Mr. Lopez]

Seriously Strong and thought provoking. I really liked the way this was written to someone ,who unknowingly is destroying the one thing in life that means so much to him. Yes, Included are the seven deadly sins but the piece seems to go beyond this to extend a message of warning to someone specific. I am not sure if this was intended or just the result of some crafty writing. Or maybe i'm just reading too much into it . None the less, In whole, the poem is very impressive and made me pay attention to the details. Your writing only gets better with every new piece. It is an honor to review and refreshing to read. Great job my friend.

Mr. Lopez

[Kory]

speechless...utterly speechless...amazing

[None]

You have a great one here and well written and paints the picture perfectly. I could see your inspiration producing several poems touching on the deadly sins.
Your last few lines really add a mysterious touch to your writing, showing how things can do someone in. Very greatly written!