My dance

again poem with the same two lines, this time used as an opening

As lightening shone and thunder blew
I danced the dance that dancers do

But should the lightning disappear

I'll dance a dance that lasts a year

 

And should the thunder's cry be done

I'll dance a dance a year plus one

 

If should the rain begin to fall

I'll dance a dance of a porcelain doll

 

But if the Sun comes out to play

I'll dance my dance another day

Reviews

[emmah]

its a beautiful and refreshing verse - imaginative and simple! the elements and their impact are etched in subtle and picturesque expressions! the "i'll dance" repetition has a powerful presence too. unique and well written. the rhyme works well and adds to the overall impact of the verse, lending a sheen to the rhythm.
ps: maybe the first four lines should be sets of two, too. :)

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... ah ... that's just beautifully written ... very, very magical ...

[azlamalo]

O wow. I love your rhymes. and this is a great poem