Miracle: Trapt

scream 'til there's silence, scream while there's life left, vanishing

standing on the water,
i feel your hands grab my feet,
pull me under
'cause it’s just you and me
and black and nothing
and i’m screaming screaming
there’s nothing i can do
[hello hello hello halo
where are you?]

i see me shaking choking drowning,
and i can feel your arms around my neck
i can hear that scarecrow song
as you’re dragging me down down down
oh oh oh, i know it doesn’t matter now
but my lungs are made of glass
and the water’s coming through the cracks.
i’m oh so weak
so let go, please?

then i hit the bottom,
and join the others trapped under the ice,
i look around at the smiling faces and dead eyes.
it's just you and me
and gray and nothing
and i’m screaming screaming screaming
there’s nothing i can[’t] do
[hello hello hello hollow
so where were you?]

 

Awards

The Kill - third prize

Sep 20, 2009

• The Kill
• Miracle: Trapt

 

Runner up

Jul 14, 2010

• Encountering the Unknown
• Miracle: Trapt
  
  

Skillfully Scary !

Aug 15, 2010

• In a Dark Wood
• Miracle: Trapt

 

Good Read

Aug 23, 2010

• Horror
• Miracle: Trapt
  
  

6th place

Sep 6, 2010

• Broken heart
• Miracle: Trapt

Author's Note

you see they always remember. they never forget a face.

Reviews

[Marie Harrison]

Wow, this is a very gripping write. Gave me goosebumps!

[Sweets]

I loved this poem (:
Great job.

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

Very good. I like this alot. Good work.

[Vyctm]

This is a very good poem. The visualizations are vivid and scary and the symbolism and repetition add to the drama of the whole piece. The flow of it was fluid despite the theme of the poem. All in all I think his is a 100/100.

[ebonpinion]

Seems lyrical and has a raw edge to it. Good write. ^_^ Ever thought of putting it to music?

[Aiden- Aiko- Kiyomi]

Like the used quote atthe top. A great poem. The emotion flows well inside the poem. Good luck.

[LetiStoned]

this is such a wonderful peom...gud job
keep inspring pepols to write!!!!