His Bravery.

His Bravery.

A Poem by Simran Kewlani
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Just a story about a guy's bravery.

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Self pity was evident,
Dampening his soul,
Burning his happiness,
Like fiery coal.

Worn out by the constant abuse,
He slept, dreaming of being set loose.

The dreams turned into nightmares,
Further awakening his fears.

Fears, that were now a part of him,
What would happen next was only in the hands of the creator,
Tightening his fists, he took a deep breath,
And he walked out through the front door.

© 2015 Simran Kewlani



Author's Note

Simran Kewlani
Hi, guys! I hope you all fine. I've been on a major writer's block, I hate when these happen. I have written this one aa few days back. I hope y'all like it. Criticize if y'all must. :)
Also, I would really appreciate it if you guys gave me suggestions for the title of this poem. I don't think this one is appropriate.

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I agree dear Poet.
"Fears, that were now a part of him,
What would happen next was only in the hands of the creator,
Tightening his fists, he took a deep breath,
And he walked out through the front door."
Sometime we must be fearless even when we don't want to be. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Simran Kewlani

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Coyote. I'm glad you liked it. As for that paragraph, a friend helped me with that since .. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You guys did very well and you are welcome.



Reviews

well developed poem Simron ... the turn with the last line is effective ... makes me cheer for him ..thats right open that door and walk on out into the sunshine ... very relatable ...universal ... applies to so many situations ..i suppose you could change the title if you wanted ..alternatives spring to mind ..but i think it is very appropriate and adds to the effect of your poem ..i wouldn't change it ..but thats just me ;)
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


This is very nice writing, and you describe quite well the process one person goes through before the final act of being brave. It's easier when things happen quickly to be a hero, but when you have time to think, it's something very different.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Simran, I thought it was very good. I'm not going to criticize it. You might use the title 'Into the fire' or something. You did a good job describing his plight. Very nice!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Simran Kewlani

1 Year Ago

Thank you. :)
a poem of great morale. really liked it!

Posted 2 Years Ago


I think it's great, title to :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Simran Kewlani

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Richard. But, what about the poem? :)
I agree dear Poet.
"Fears, that were now a part of him,
What would happen next was only in the hands of the creator,
Tightening his fists, he took a deep breath,
And he walked out through the front door."
Sometime we must be fearless even when we don't want to be. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Simran Kewlani

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Coyote. I'm glad you liked it. As for that paragraph, a friend helped me with that since .. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You guys did very well and you are welcome.

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