city of pain

city of pain

A Poem by gothicchica

lost in the pain of rejection my brother woud cry, lost in the pain of being taken my sister would lie she said she was fine but i knew he truth, lost the pain i took out my anger in paper.

lost in the city of pain i will oneday die , never to forget never to forgive
lost in a city of anger lost in a city of pain
aleays to remember lostin a city of paper


© 2011 gothicchica



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Pretty good poem with a decent flow. I like how you use writing as an outlet. I did/do the same


FYI: Other than obvious lack of capitalization and punctuation, you accidently typed "he" when you meant "the," "oneday" instead of "one day," "aleays" instead of "always," and "lostin" instead of "lost in."

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Pretty good poem with a decent flow. I like how you use writing as an outlet. I did/do the same


FYI: Other than obvious lack of capitalization and punctuation, you accidently typed "he" when you meant "the," "oneday" instead of "one day," "aleays" instead of "always," and "lostin" instead of "lost in."

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

gothicchica,

This I do say is an original... to which only some of experience could speak. Being lost is a state of mind - I agree completely. The twist on the physical relation is utterly brilliant.

Stating I enjoyed this , is understating.

Thank you for this write...

Legacy

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very meaningful to use the image of a city to represent pain. Excellent poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Oh wow!
Nice turn around, beautifully crafted!
xx

Posted 7 Years Ago


This was really good. Keep on penning.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Cool!! You and your sister are very serious in writing poems... :O

Posted 7 Years Ago



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