when i was in love with you

love and loss

 

It all started with a “hey” and a “hi” there was love in the sky

We both had one heart, one pulse, one reason to live

Everywhere I turned I saw reminders of you

I couldn’t sleep couldn’t write I saw destiny in view

I changed my clothes my looks I wanted to impress

My love was deep, deeper than any word could express

Every touch, every smile every gaze were like twin-stars

Every minute, every hour, everyday was like Christmas

And like morning dew on leaves the love faded away

It was fun while it lasted but now memories to slay

And from miles away we both see our love remains

Now my heart is empty I must find love again

        

Reviews

[Gina]

Sad but guess what, it just made the piece even more wonderful! Excellent job! I could relate to this and I felt like it was your writing style that made me love it so much! Keep it up!

Always, Gina

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A forlorn and sad piece depicting the gaining and the loss of something precious.

[sky]

Thanks John

[Beautiful Mistake]

I love the emotion and message you are trying to convey, Although I would've loved to really loved to have seen. You really drive it home with the power of your words rather than just the emotion. Good job

[sky]

Thank you my friend, and thanks for sharing your opinion, I’ll try to improve next time

[Coyote Poetry]

A journey into and out of love. Love's lessons are many. I liked the thoughts and the description in the poetry. I did like the honest ending. We can't give-up. Just hope true love shall come. Thank you Sky for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[sky]

Thanks Coyote :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. I like poetry that ask question and leave something for the reader to think about. This poem did.

[Najam Us Saher]

You brought tears in my eyes. I loved how this poem had a little but very powerful emotional twist. Yes do give love another chance.

[sky]

Thank you Najam

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome I thank you for sharing such a lovely poem.