Moonlight

Moonlight

A Poem by Sleiman Azizi
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This is a poem about mortality

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shadowed night
it was the moon
all along

© 2014 Sleiman Azizi


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Sleiman Azizi
I don't mind negative criticism. Positive criticism is fine too, so either way, don't be shy. Thanks.

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wow..very short indeed but meaningful non the less

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sleiman Azizi

9 Years Ago

Thanks for the kind words.
Too many moments wasted in wishing to be somewhere else... Somebody else... But once the end is year, all you've ever been and done, becomes exactly all you've wanted all along ♥

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sleiman Azizi

9 Years Ago

I suppose that is one way of saying that we get what we deserve.
Snort and meaningful, well done!

Posted 9 Years Ago


A. Amos

9 Years Ago

sorry i mean short and meaningful, read in the morning was half sleep...my friend KWP brought me her.. read more
KWP

9 Years Ago

he Amos ... thanks for coming :) very nice of you and nice to see you xx
A. Amos

9 Years Ago

You're most welcome my dear, anything for you...hope all is great!
So few words, so many thoughts come to mind. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sleiman Azizi

9 Years Ago

Thank you.

I hope the thoughts are useful ones.
short and to the point enjoyed the read

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sleiman Azizi

9 Years Ago

Thanks for that.

I'm going to start a campaign to save the electrons.
 wordman

9 Years Ago

good luck with that
Darkness
isn't always
of seeing

Sometimes I feel perceptions border on the tastes of life experience. The clarity of our intent nestles within the consciousness of our reader - did we awaken it or not?

Posted 9 Years Ago


KWP

9 Years Ago

eye's open
tears came
because of the wind
Chris

9 Years Ago

ears seldom blink - just the mind within...

good to see you.
KWP

9 Years Ago

Hearing
echo's of
another's soul
crying
inside passing
winds of n.. read more
A night that gets overshadwed by the enlightment of the moon. As the light itself does not belong to the moon then consequently the process is a by the way an acknoweledgment of the power of the sun. But reflection needs be for one to be confronted and see.

It was the moon all along then I agree

Thankyou

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rene Salinas

9 Years Ago

Hahaha not quite the American born at 42 has lived the american dream goes to Japan the Japanese son.. read more
Sleiman Azizi

9 Years Ago

Sounds like two Zen monks walking into a bar... :)
Rene Salinas

9 Years Ago

Hahahahha Ok I confess
The question of consciousness and its ether - mortality - is never too far from my thoughts. I have a lot of time for those who can smile with their eyes when faced with the questions mortality raises.

In saying that, I didn't try to do anything with this poem other than to run with the first line and see how minimalist I could make it. I honestly believe that poetry is less about words than about the space they suggest. Natural imagery is a goal of mine too, so perhaps that needs to be taken into account.

Anyway, I think I've done alright with this poem. I'd be curious as to what others thought.

Posted 9 Years Ago


this makes me smile ... all along it was the cheeky moon ... perfect !!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sleiman Azizi

9 Years Ago

A giant cheese ball.

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Added on September 30, 2014
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Tags: mortality, life, death, moon


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