Idolatry

This is another poem spoken by the character Alciabades in the Noh play that I am working on.

Mortal libations
Man's silent lamentation
A heifer's altar
The gods demand their worship
When I demand mine.

Author's Note

I'm interested in what mood is created in the reader's mind by the verse's imagery. If you also happen to have any experience with Noh drama, a comment or two would also be much appreciated. If not, that is fine too as I would welcome all criticisms, be they yay or nay.

Reviews

[Sleiman Azizi]

Initially, this poem was written so that the speaker's voice was much more pronounced and dare I say aggressive. I softened it somewhat so that the emotion of the verse depends upon the capacity of the person playing the character it is meant to represent. I think the words in this poem work and once the the play is finished I am very much hoping to hear them being spoken live.

[Rene Salinas]

I'm loving the possibility to let go wild I hope you don't mind but if you do please do say so and I will revert back to something a little more rational.

Here is my mood:

Physical suffocation through asphyxiation by material oxygenation
This drowned Man on a ever-downward vortex, only to surface
Through Divine decision, on which all sense of self is in constriction
The vortex-acceleration in constant repetition.
Resolute the purpose
It demands aquisition.

Thankyou

[Sleiman Azizi]

I think poetry - to say nothing about art in general - is quite rational.

[Rene Salinas]

As long as it is ok Sleiman Idon't want to seem disrespectful

[Sleiman Azizi]

Why would it be disrespectful?

[Rene Salinas]

Well I do loads of reviews some just want you to describe what is writtten not share what you feel so you asking to share the mood is slightly unusual but as you can see it is greatly appreciated it from my part....

[Sleiman Azizi]

I think being slightly unusual is a prerequisite for being normal.

[Rob Santana]

There are God's, then there are slaves. Idolatry has two sides. But in the end, both want respect. awesome piece. Very creative/eccentric.

[Sleiman Azizi]

That is very true. Everyone wants some kind of respect.