Will You Be Mine?

Will You Be Mine?

A Poem by Jordan A. Wilson
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This one is actually a song that I wrote

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You are my oasis in a concrete desert.

You are the clear sky shining through the trees.

I don’t think it could get any better.

Cuz I have you right here sticking it out with me.

 

What I really want to say is…

What you mean to me.

I really want to show you…

What we could be.

I’d climb the highest peak.

Ain’t no mountain that’s too high.

What I really want to know is…

Will you be mine?

 

When the trail ends and the bitter

cold takes over.

And the darkness makes it hard to see.

Just the thought of you, girl, keeps me from slowing.

You fill my head with soothing melodies.

 

What I really want to say is…

What you mean to me.

I really want to show you…

What we could be.

I’d climb the highest peak.

Ain’t no mountain that’s too high.

What I really want to know is…

Will you be mine?

© 2012 Jordan A. Wilson


Author's Note

Jordan A. Wilson
Feel free to review. I both respect and appreciate criticism, positive or negative.

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i really liked this because you weren't afraid to be sweet. sometimes i think these days that so many people are focusing more on the harder, harsher aspects of love. not to say there isn't truth in that as well, however i do think that it's so easy to forget the sweet and exciting nature with which love begins. i think this is commendable and lovely.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This is beautiful and really sweet. I love your romantic voice and how you made the reader understand everything you were expressing. I usually include a suggestion in my reviews, but this is so perfect I don't think there's anything to improve on :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Very nicely written, I enjoyed this

Posted 11 Years Ago


I really like the simplicity and humbleness of the poem. Its wonderful but you can do a lot more good to it like addition of more feelings and imaginations to it. Else good job. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i really liked this because you weren't afraid to be sweet. sometimes i think these days that so many people are focusing more on the harder, harsher aspects of love. not to say there isn't truth in that as well, however i do think that it's so easy to forget the sweet and exciting nature with which love begins. i think this is commendable and lovely.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is BEAUTIFUL. One of the sweetest poems I've come across to! If you recited this poem to a girl, I don't think she would hesitate to say "Yes". Really really nice job :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 13, 2012
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Tags: want, beauty, comfort, song

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Jordan A. Wilson
Jordan A. Wilson

Carrollton, KY



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I'm a 22 year old Entrepreneurship Student of Northern Kentucky University from the small town of Carrollton, Ky. I play guitar and began writing poetry as a hobby four years ago. My main goals in wri.. more..

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