Tears

I wrote this for sophie's contest, but i was actually gonna write this anyways. sadly, this had just happened to me...

No

two words

that mean so much

when they are told to you

 

this is what you told me

when I asked you

 

All that I wanted

 was to be with him

to see him

to be near to him

 

and you said it so plainly

without caring at all

 

No

 

It broke my heart

I was shattered

I watched as you walked away

 

I ran after you

all that I asked

was why

 

you said

 that you didnt trust him

that you wouldn't trust him

 

I then told you

but if you don't trust him

then you don't trust me

 

you turned around then

you looked at me

then you started yelling

 

You screamed at me

that i wasn't to go near him

I wasn't to see him

I couldn't be with him

 

You said that I couldn't 'love'

I didn't know how

or what it was

 

then you said the worst thing

you said

you didn't trust me

and fith that you walked away

 

I turned around

and ran to my room

 tears bluring my vision

I sat on my bed and wailed

 

for hours I wouldn't come out

I wouldn't stop crying

for him

 

These tears were for him

everything that i did

was for him

 

every smile

every hug

every laugh

every thought

every breath

was all for him

 

my undying love

my unknown love

my unyielding love

for him

 

tear after tear

fell that day

from my big brown eyes

 

for him

these were his tears

 

 

 

Author's Note

Please, Please, Please review! this came from my heart, my broken, loving,crying heart.

Reviews

[Rasputin]

I glanced at your profile. Being fourteen sucks because you can't go to the liquor store in a situation like this. However, it's also an advantage because you're still young. You'll forget about this bullshit soon enough. When you're that age, everything is the end of the world until you realize that it's really not. Anyway, good luck with all that.

[kayBiE]

he hurt you he hurt me such art brings people together but worry not you tears weren't in vein he will always love and miss you

[Pritesh]

Very well done!your poem amazed me!keep going!

[luna11]

I really love this poem. It's amazing :D
You write really well.
I can see how hard this is for you, but remember, adults always want their kids to stay young and innocent, and when they realise you're growing up really fast, they want to hold on to your innocence and youth. That's why I don't tell my parents much ;)
Good luck.
xx

[Sophie]

my review didn't show up and it was really long!

[Sophie]

[BLBrown]

From your very descriptive poem I can see that you are hurting so much inside. And it is easy to understand how you feel because most people have gone through similar things at some point in their lives. Love is a powerful thing. I think you should feel good about creating this piece as a result of all this turmoil. It is so important in writing to be honest about emotions and you have done that here. Very good. Feel better for the road ahead is good and long.

[Louie]

I do not critique many poems, I just don't get the details. I will say that I could feel your sadness and it reminded me so much of being in my late teens. It is a fine line intertwined between obsession, possession, desperation, and love. I would say you will love again and lose again and I would be correct but it never lessens the sorrow. Oh and there was one typo. "and fith that you walked away". I hope you find some solace in your writing, I know that is where I go.

[Ezekiel Silver]

This is an incredible poem. It shows a lot of emotions, good and bad ones alike. I really like this poem. Thanks for posting it.

[Sunflower]

i love this so very much, very nice write

[SuicidePact.]

awww this was beautiful, i feel all these different emotions when i read this