Virus of Love

Love is contagious

                  COMMON VIRUS OF LOVE

 

Father kissed me…

He has common cold..

 

Baby brother lay on my pillow

He has common cold.

 

Beloved gave the glass of juice remains

He has common cold.

 

First summer rain kissed my forehead..

Can it cause common cold…

 

Why expressions of love..

Disciplined in such a way…

 

To spread common cold…

That now I have common cold..

 

In my bed I think of common cold virus…

Virus that thrives upon love….

Virus that thrives upon kisses and embraces…

Virus of love indeed…..!!!!

 

No wonder why there is no medicine

For this common cold…in science

Love conquers everything…..

 

 

 

Reviews

[Lorraine]

I love the concept. I find it witty and thoughtful. However, I think the actual wordings can be further reformed. Some of them sound off and too casual.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Lolz, this is so true..and really you have conveyed that feeling of love so cleverly and effortlessly here in your writing.
I loved it :)

[Eagle Cruagh]

Clever, witty, easy to read,
well constructed, flows nicely,
humorous, cute, virus free,
all in the name of love.

----Eagle Cruagh

[alesuriko]

Very nice. I like the emphasis on the common cold and the idea of love as a disease or infection. Sure it's not really original and it's been overdone, but I liked how you wrote about it. The structure and flow could use some work but otherwise it's a good poem. Well done.

[GunMetal]

wow, excellent. Very clever.

[Daniel Gardner]

This is good. All of our ways of displaying love can transfer disease... I guess thats because we love them enough to risk that. That says something, doesnt it? Nice aspect of thought.

[Tate Morgan]

Beautiful just beautiful

[James Watts]

That's a novel way to look at the common cold. Nice work.

[Huggy Bear]

I love the piece. It is very smart and well told

[Coyote Poetry]

Only cure for the common cold is homemade chicken soup and vicks. A lot of love and kindness. I like this poem. The story made me smile. thank you.
Coyote