NAKED LOVE

All stanzas of this poem are not for a single individual…

NAKED LOVE

 

There is blindness in love

There is love in blindness

Want to see?

Look at your mother.

 

There is imperfections in love

There is love in imperfection

Want to see?

Look at your father.

 

There is madness in love

There is love in madness

Want to see?

Look at your boy friend

 

There is selfishness in love

There is love in selfishness

Want to see?

Look at yourself..

 

There is terror in love

There is love in terror

Want to see?

Look at your teacher

 

There is hate in love

There is love in hate

Want to see?

Look at your husband..

 

There is passion in love

There is love in passion

Want to see?

Look back at your first night

 

There is lethargy in love

There is love in lethargy

Want to see?

Look at your mother in law..!!!

 

There is a desire to quit love

There is love in desire to quit

Want to see?

Wait for some years after marriage.

 

There is illegitimacy in love

There is love in illegitimacy

Want to see?

Look at your male coworker

 

There is indifference in love

There is love in indifference

Want to see?

Look at the judge in the court

 

There is divinity in love

There is love in divinity

Want to see?

Think of God

 

Reviews

[Tracie D'Angelo]

I liked the structure of this poem. I think it fits the subject very well. Some of the comparisons I wasn't really sure about for instance the teacher and mother-in-law. I'm sure many folks could substitute some...fine...words for the mother-in-law. Anyway, I kinda saw a growing process in this. First with parents, then boyfriend, teacher, then onto marriage, divorce and hot coworkers. The final stanza was a perfect ending! Nice job!

[Angel Veselinov]

Great idea for a poem. Great execution of words too. Loved the last stanzaa most :). It really corresponds to my believes and understandings :) and i think you made your point perfect. Really loved what you are trying to say here. Thanks for sharing :) gotta be 100/100 :P

[Huggy Bear]

I love it:)

[SoLongAndThanksForAllTh..]

This poem uses a clever way of turning phrases around on themselves and suggests the reader looks at the contradictions in their life.

Firstly I want to congratulate you for the originality of this poem. The technique of taking a sentence and then reflecting it back on itself is quite refreshing. My only concern is that after seeing this structure twelve times it becomes a little strained. Sometimes less is more when it comes to writing.

There are some really thought provoking ideas in this poem. I particularly like the stanzas concerning selfishness and passion, these are themes that you can meditate on for some time. There are also a couple of images I wasn't able to grasp however. I'm not quite sure of the terror in teaching - perhaps I had very soft teachers! Nevertheless, there is a very Zen like feel to many of the opening lines in these stanzas.

Overall I found this poem excellent. The structure is unique and it really makes the reader pause for thought.

[Hello, Goodbye]

good stuff here..

[Richard Williams]

A bunch of labels that we as humans apply to life and facets of life, naked assertions, subjective of course. Line (4) should read "There are imperfections in love." Love is a chameleon. Most of what you say I can go along with, love is blind, yep, love is imperfect, of course. But I think in some instances you mix oil and water. If you're in court before a judge, love is absent; it's down the hall somewhere doing a crossword. As we plod along thru life there are factors, there are non-factors. A nice concept and one to arouse thought.

[Miss Coral]

Interesting concept- some of the comparisons were a bit more difficult for me to relate to, but I can get them. The repetition of the structure kind of made this seem more bland to me, but I still liked it.

Nice job.

-Coral-

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words are true. True love blind us from our love weaknesses. We see good and wonderful when we look at the one we love. A very nice poem. Love is very difficult to describe. I believe take a lot of good luck and patience. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

nice idea of the poem...i like it:) nice work!

[dovetailer]

What a delicious concept. Very well written. VERY NICE POEM. Most of he comparisons are true...I think I'd use the word imperfection in place of imperfectness...it rolls off the tongue better...I think I'd soften the terror with the teacher...Wondered about the madness with the boyfriend, but I've always been the boyfriend....never had one...maybe that's the way we come across LOL.
Very nice. I should send a copy of this to me mother-in-law!
Thanks for sharing.