SMELL OF LOVE IT IS SOMEWHERE HERE

Just a poem

SMELL OF LOVE

                 IT IS SOMEWHERE HERE

 

I narrow my attention

Focus on my olfaction

I fail to grasp..

That colorless odorless gas

Still, I knew it is somewhere here..

..

Everyday I smear myself with

Perfumes made from the smiles

Of fresh flowers in my vase..

Jasmine, Rose and lily..

To ward off unnecessary odors.

Still, my nose failed to detect the smell…

 

I quit my search.

Perhaps it may not be there

It is only some caprice of my mind..

If love is somewhere around,

It will waft its redolence all around

Spontaneously …

 

One day

He looked into my eyes.

For some time..

Longer for a rose petal to open

Suddenly I sensed it..

Wow…it struck my nose!!!

 

As if..

Some bottle of perfume slipped

And broken into pieces..

Unleashing the whole fragrance..

So pungently, relentlessly..

It flooded my olfaction mercilessly

In torrents not known to me before

That I dazed in pleasure and ecstasy..

And succumbed to the awareness

That I am in love with him

 

Now the only smell I breathe in

Is nothing but smell of love

For him.

Even the oxygen gives way to it.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Tracie D'Angelo]

Okay, I've read love poems where folks have felt their love. They envisioned their love. They have touched their love. Never have I read a poem where someone has smelt their love! This is definitely a first and you've done very well! Very creative and imaginative! Very nice job!

[Angel Veselinov]

Really true emotional piece loved it and felt it while reading. Thanks for sharind all those pure and great emotions. Really positive and romantic one thanks for sharing :)

[SoLongAndThanksForAllTh..]

This is a poem that really overloads the sense. No, that's not a typo, we have here a piece of writing that's solely dedicated to smell which is quite a novelty.

What I think is really impressive about this poem is the fact that it is unwavering in its focus on just one sense. I imagine there was quite a temptation to begin describing the colour of the flowers or the face of the lover but you haven't succumbed to that.

Linguistically there is quite a tongue in cheek feel to this poem. You use a very conversational style in parts such as 'wow... it struck my noise'. I think this helps to carry your choice of such a restricted topic as a very serious tone might have made the single-minded focus on smell seem somewhat contrived. The one thing I'm not very keen on is the extensive use of ellipses. Firstly they should always consist of three periods (e.g. '..' isn't valid) and secondly when you read something aloud and use them as written it makes the poem sound horribly stilted, particularly as you leave out other punctuation (which is fine in a poem as it lets the reader decide).

Overall I'd say this is an inventive poem that nicely describes how love can infilitrate our lives and then swamp our senses.

[Huggy Bear]

Great poem:)

[Richard Williams]

Creatively put with good imagery and with attention to detail and reality, that which appeals to the senses, good job.

[Bette]

isnt that moment you realize THIS IS IT wonderful. if only we could live that moment over and over .. maybe our worlds would be better. well done

[Hello, Goodbye]

good creative and imaginative work.. good job..

[Ruth]

This is a clever poem hon!
The use of fragrance is powerful in this and the reader can almost smell them! lol
A great poem!
It adds an impact to the writing, great work!
xx

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

I love the way you deascribed love being a scent... Very beautifully ritten ^^

[Globy]

:):):):)
gret writting... realy :)
I'll be watching..