Summer Days

Summer Days

A Poem by C.C. Marx
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just a little something :)

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Soft footprints on the beach

Fading from the nearing tide

Frothing waves pound the shore

The surf engulfs my feet

Rhythmic ripples

Sing softly as we walk

In the crook of your shoulder

My head did lie

Peaceful and calm

Hands entwined


© 2013 C.C. Marx



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C.C. Marx
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Bliss with a lot of love................

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

Why thank you for the kind review!!
A nice static mindpic of a warm and soft moment. Like the after description we might make of a photo we saw...

But it feels very static, unmoving, jumbled thought impressions... perhaps making it more flowing by adding personal touches, timing, and a sense of paced but active word tones?

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

Thanks for your kind words and your feedback is much appreciated
I love this, a beautiful, poetic moment captured perfectly by words. Particularly early on I felt in place of the narrator standing on the beach soaking the moment in. Well done :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

I appreciate you taking the time to review it :)
This was filled with the environment of love and how surroundings acknowledge its presence. Amazing!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much for the review
Nice, I love beaches. Very chilled sorta feel to it, I feel the first line coulda been a but more like "golden beach" or something, I feel just sayin beach isn't enough. Still overall good work :) Keep it up

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

I can't write now, too much emotional s**t to deal with
Sam Gregory

4 Years Ago

It doesn't need re-writing :) But, my advice about the emotional s**t is, you might aswell vent it o.. read more
C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

I might try that later I'm too busy trying to be alone
This was a nice one!

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

Thanks for reviewing!!
CookieDough

4 Years Ago

No problem!
A sweet moment you described...enjoyed your words.
~SyberRose

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much for the review!! Glad u enjoyed it :)
I just want to tuck this one in my pocket and take it with me all day, it's like a big beachy smile that makes me feel all warm and gooey. Love it!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

Not final exams but I have a math test that counts for a significant portion of my grade so like an .. read more
Frieda P

4 Years Ago

good luck with that, math gives me the heebie jeebies
C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

Same if I run out of the room screaming, no one should be surprised....happy pi day!!!!! ;)
Awwww, sweeeeet!!! :D lol we can do this sort of thing in January sometimes... lol :P The imagery in this poem is phenomenal... :D

Posted 4 Years Ago


Admiral Kirk

4 Years Ago

Ah, dogs are strange...
C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

mine is especially stupid I wonder sometimes...she ran into a glass door the other day
Admiral Kirk

4 Years Ago

Hmm... So did I! :D
Short but sweet nice job!

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

Thanks for reviewing Kelsey!!
Lover Of Words

4 Years Ago

My pleasure

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