When Family Becomes Just a Word

When Family Becomes Just a Word

A Poem by C.C. Marx
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First poem in awhile, so I'm a little rusty. Recently I had a nasty fight with my brother and things were said, lines were crossed.

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Cringing at the hateful words
Strung together from ignorance
Temporary blanks of mind
That make the insults justified
Four simple letters
With power to shatter hope
Turn happiness to heartbreak
In the twitch of lips
The subconscious decision
To choose what stings most
The internal pride
That forces it out in spite
The blood in our veins
Calls for no special privileges
But instead warrants guilt
When damage has been done.

© 2013 C.C. Marx



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C.C. Marx
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Aly
Great job C. The title caught my attention

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much
Rusty I think not, good. and Good you wear a little guilt, Crossing lines, had a poem with that name,Brothers are turds me I have three sisters, though my eldest has wiped the "Family" of me off her shoe.

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

Sometimes we say the one thing we know will hurt most because we can and out of spite, but if there'.. read more
Awwww, Hun, I'm sure everything will be okay. Remember I'm only a pm away for a vent. This was good, a lot of raw emotions in here.

~ Noodle.

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

Thanks noodles we are tying to work it out but I mean things take time thanks for the review
s y e

4 Years Ago

Yes they do, just know that I'm here and whatever happened will clear up soon,
I hope things will work out ...A good write...:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

As do I, thanks for the review
Sami Khalil

4 Years Ago

My pleasure...:)
some things you can forgive but most words you never forget.

Emotionally charged but...feels disjointed, as if in a shuffled sequence - to me. Too intentionally vague I think, possibly done to draw upon reader empathy?

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

I didn't totally want to relive the experience, something's are better tried to be forgotten but tha.. read more
Chris

4 Years Ago

THAT explains the sense of vagueness I had. It hurts, but it really would be more emotionally power.. read more
C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

I understand that and will take that into consideration if my lazy self ever chooses to revise this
Hopefully, you and your brother will be able to patch things up...it takes time...blood is thicker than water...I'm closer with my sister then my brother but I have one brother and one sister who passed away...Nicely penned..Rose

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

Sorry for your loss but I do hope things get better between us, things have been strained lately. Th.. read more
i dont fight with my brother anymore... because... i stopped talking to him period... and my life has been better ever since :-)

Posted 4 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

4 Years Ago

I wish it were that simple but sometimes you have to stick it out, I still care about him, probably .. read more

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