Forever lost your love

All I see is my heart bleeding on the floor

beating each minute more slow,

 wiping it's tears  because it lost your love

with all the pieces scattered on the floor.

And you're standing on the other side of the door.

saying that you don't want to hurt me,

but yet you did, because you are everything to me,

But to you I'm just a friend, no more than that, and that's what hurts the most,

because with you I learn to be happy and I learned to love.

And it hurts to find out that you don't know if your feelings are real anymore,

and it kills me to know,

That you might find your real true love,

someone that is not me......

Is like if you took a knife and stabbed me right in the middle,

Is like if you and pinched it real hard with a needle.

Is like if you took every breath I had with just one word,

Is like if I feel that I forever lost your love.

Author's Note

What do you think ?

Reviews

[Charles D. Moorer]

The first job of the poetess is the get her thoughts down. Her second job is to come back and to make corrections. While you have the emotional part down, there are some grammatical errors and structural issues with the piece that keep it from being all it could be. There are come image conflicts that take place that you may not be aware of. Washington Heights?

[Shalini Dinesh (Poet's ..]

the poem had an easy flow and was so innocent and heartfelt, true to its emotions, i liked the feel of the poem...

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the story. Poetry has no limit. You wrote with a honest pen. Heart and soul on a sheet of paper. I do rewrite sometime. But I like the raw poems. True feelings on the paper. Your description and emotion is strong in your words. A very good poem.
Coyote

[Allmax]

I think you are a very talented poet. I love the easy flow of this poem. So smooth in its transition from phtrse to phrase. Easy to relate to and straight from the heart... Awesome.