THE LAZY ME

THE LAZY ME

A Poem by Akshita
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This poem itself is a not-so-pleasing description of my personality!

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THE LAZY ME

 

Oh! Why am I so lazy?!

So lazy as that;

Feel at work-time so hazy;

Yes, I am like that!

 

Late to leave the bed,

Do it in a moaning way;

Waiting for luck,

To hatch itself one day!

Thinking, dreaming, everything’s vivid;

But then still, why am I so lazy and stupid?!

 

The answer does my brain give, in a dry way;

Says,” Babe, you are lazy, it’s as plain as that;

So don’t be so hazy, at work don’t relax,

Honey work hard, you’ve all of it in you;

Or you will forever be as lazy as that!”


© 2016 Akshita



Author's Note

Akshita
Just speak your heart guys, no need to hold back!

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Very original & uninhibited . . . most people don't have the transparency or bravery to describe themselves this way. Altho your form isn't strict (rhyming here & there, etc.), this falls in line with the message that you're too lazy to bother with structure (which is fun & understandable). I hope you're really not down on yourself, as this would suggest. You have so much going for you, to be able to share a tongue-in-cheek (kidding) profile of yourself like this.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Akshita

1 Year Ago

Thank you! :)



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Good job accepting laziness as a habit

Posted 9 Months Ago


Oh, I am one of them! And many of them at this time during winter! So difficult to leave the warmth of bed, early morning.

Posted 1 Year Ago


That's really cute.
Although some work with the rhyming scheme would be nice. That and the arrangement of words.
Other than that its marvellous.
I specially like the line
Waiting for luck
"To hatch itself one day "
It drips laziness 😜.
And the best thing is the strength you show in the last stanza.
Delivers a strong message.
'Although I may be lazy but don't underestimate me. I can change that whenever I want'
It's really nice and brave
I am guessing this was you experimental poem. Wasn't it?


Posted 1 Year Ago


Akshita

1 Year Ago

Yup! This was my first poem. Thanks alot for your kind review!
I think everyone who reads this can relate. I am lazy. You are lazy. We all are lazy. Good one dear. Keep writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Akshita

1 Year Ago

Thank you!!
Akshita, it's a true piece and I liked it truly.. Being honest, nothing is there to be shy in being lazy. Even I was lazy once. But studies in high school is a kind of making-all-time-busy stuff...
I liked the simplicity and truth you maintained in the poem. And the rhyming words add an extra satisfaction...
Just carry on, you are doing good...
Anindita : )

Posted 1 Year Ago


Akshita

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot for your review! :)
I love the honest words. Dude.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Akshita

1 Year Ago

thank you:)
you just gotta be free,great write !

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Akshita

1 Year Ago

thanks a lot!
 wordman

1 Year Ago

you are welcome
Very original & uninhibited . . . most people don't have the transparency or bravery to describe themselves this way. Altho your form isn't strict (rhyming here & there, etc.), this falls in line with the message that you're too lazy to bother with structure (which is fun & understandable). I hope you're really not down on yourself, as this would suggest. You have so much going for you, to be able to share a tongue-in-cheek (kidding) profile of yourself like this.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Akshita

1 Year Ago

Thank you! :)
I like it....more relaxing from the intensity of moods

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Akshita

1 Year Ago

Thanks! I really try to write serious poems but never get very far with them.
A funny and easy read. Hoping to see more of this kind of poetry around!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Akshita

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot. It was my first poem, and i hope to write a lot more!

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