Hey Freak!

Such an arrogant poem!

I know you don’t mean to be so,

Not born this way either!

Time’s made you what you are now;

But still, can’t you even try to be better?

 

Your excessively sweet words,

Your slimy, sloppy smile…

Your nasal voice, those stupid rings;

Get me all freaked out!

 

I want to stay away from you,

Don’t want to make you sad;

By my cutting cruel remarks…

They’re so hard to bear and I know that;

 

So honey, just leave me alone,

Let me have some peace!

I am tired of these stupid talks with you…

When you know, I am not the one you please!

 

Author's Note

Believe me, it is really very irritating to have such people around you...all the time. Trying to please you in the silliest ways.

Reviews

[T. Edana Talbott]

This poem is so blunt, and I think you've spoken for many. Great piece!

[SweetWriter88]

I love this! It's so expressive and truthful.

[Akshita]

Thanks!!! : )

[Richard🖌]

Good rant, Akshita!

Sometimes, we just have to get it out, and what better way than to let it all spillover in a deeply expressive poem where we can be honest without really harming anyone … besides, who can't relate in some meaningful way to this openly candid piece. I can imagine how many are saying, "I wish I could write things like this sometimes, or I wish I'd written this to shed those frustrating, pent-up emotions!"

Some just don't seem to get the hints, making it necessary to come down on them a bit harder than one might wish or normally would, and you've done it splendidly with smooth flow, great words choices, and imagery that paints the picture perfectly into your readers' minds.

You really made this one come to life, and you certainly got the idea across … so, don't worry, dear Akshita, I'll be bothering you no more … ha-hahhh! ⁓ Richard

[Akshita]

Thank you so much for your review! : ) Your reviews are something I love to get.

[Richard🖌]

You're sooo welcome, Akshita … and, your poems are something I love to read! ; )

[TaraNicole]

Im in agreement that it is completely arrogant. With much hope that it is in 3rd person..With that being said, it's ringing with an awful truth. Good job..

[Akshita]

Thanks a lot!

[Asante]

Pray the fake get exposed!
I appreciate you having penned this piece, Akshita. A piece overflowing with frustration and tension; one that I'm certain many of us can relate to right down to the end.
Good job. :)

[Akshita]

Thanks!!! : )

[Amber Lily]

Some people just don't understand how other people function, and think differently of them for it. But you're right, those are not the type of people you want around you. You want positive people who care about what you have to say.

Nicely done, the message of the poem speaks loud and clear, for everyone who is different. Great work :)

[Akshita]

Thank you Amber!

[andrew mitchell]

a good write on a subject that wears us down. its all time wasting really, that constant arguing etc.

[Akshita]

Thanks a lot!

[Elcques]

This is something one can easily relate to. I like how you have put all things together! It's not that long but the emotion is conveyed very well (and it reminds me of someone, really). :D

[Akshita]

Thanks for the review!

[wordman]

i can feel your pain,and your frustrations

[Akshita]

Thanks! : )

[Pushkar Prabhat]

okay.......
writing is good.......
but i somehow did not like it.............i can sense frustration and scorn........not that it is a bad thing........but here they seems to make the poem.......ummmmmm.......opaque......harsh.........a little over the line......
i know you aimed for it........but........

i am sorry.........i know you wouldn't have expected such a review from me.......but this is what i felt........

again......the writing is good......

happy writing.....
:)
p.s. please don't let this review make you even sadder....... :) :)

[Akshita]

Why would this review make me sad? I do not like the same thing about this poem. But I had to write it and get rid of what I was feeling. I hope I do not write such poems too often. Thank you for your truthful review! : )