souls be freed

this is peace

a place in me 

or so it seems

every start, so perfect

with the saddest ending

tales of love 

of joy and pain

lets try again

not to ruin it the same 

time to run

to the place of laughter

a simple meadow 

with those crowns 

we made together

wilting as time progresses

that little pond out on the edge 

where the cow took a swim

in the start of winter

can we go back?

will we return?

to be in that place

with you i yearn

or shall we go to the small cottage

or the room haunted by precious spirit

it seems so peaceful 

full of grace

a rest in this unending race

no forced smiles

no fake laughs

simply joy in which we bask 

yes it seems rather silly 

to write of such frivolity

but still i long 

to hear our laughter like a song 

to dance with the leaves

above our heads

so this i write

lost in the memory

to tell myself it is no story

the little details that i see

like a little flower resting on my knee

your little laughs 

at my meaningless tasks

climbing a fence to reach new heights

the forest silent outside the cows lowing

your little willow where we made our crowns

where we had no worries and no frowns

here i'm thinking when  this you read, 

that maybe in things like this our souls be freed

Reviews

[Dolfury Nixie Ritter]

I like how this is meant to be melancholy because you miss the past, yet when the reader reads it they can't help but feel happy because of all the cheerful memories overpowering the bad in there. I like how you put into detail the tasks you and the anonymous other person did, and the description of the "scene" around you when this took place. A lot of detail is good because it helps paint a picture in the reader's head of what's happening. The rhyming scheme also makes it sound like a song. I was practically singing it in my head as I read it. :D

[marie]

thank you :)

[Salar Majak]

"where the cow took a swim
in the start of winter"
ok i don't know why i liked this sentence but i did. i loved the free style of the poem, i loved the memories and felt like it was mine to remember, i loved th flow, and the beauty that soared above this write, this is personal. thans for sharing.

[marie]

Thanks for reading:) I'm glad you liked it:)

[Salar Majak]

you are welcome

[marie]

:)

[Hali Abern]

I really like this. Great job. I'm not good at poetry at all. :)

[marie]

lol thank you :)

[Adam M. Snow]

Beautiful

[marie]

thank you :)

[Adam M. Snow]

You are welcome

[marie]

:)

[Patrick Henry]

This reminds me of my poem, "The Power of One". I like it!! You have packed so many awesome moments most often overlooked by selfish moods and foggy eyes. To mention a lot of those "quirks" like the little laughs at meaningless tasks is fun to see!! xoxo -Mark

[marie]

i'll have to read that one love that you liked it :)

[NaugleB]

Very inspiring! Kept me interested until the very end. Great work

[marie]

Thanks:)

[}Echo{]

I like this. It's cool. :)

[marie]

Thank you it is from a time that is very dear to me

[Saya Marie Vandiesmonte]

This is absolutely amazing. Everyone yearns for that kind of life where there is no sadness or hurt but happiness. Though in this life there is pain and sadness, we will one day find a place like that. We can only hope that our children in the future will know the same childhood we once enjoyed without all of the technologies of the worlds. To find contentment in the little things such as sitting down under a tree and just feeling the wind.

[marie]

thank you for the review and i really do pray that the next generation can see the peace in the future

[Ethale Captor]

We shall return, I promise.

[marie]

we can only hope :)