if you saw this

if you saw this

A Poem by marie

If you found this
What would you do?
Would you see my dreams
Would you tell me you love me

If you saw me
What would you say
Would you understand
Would you see I'm so fragile

If you heard me
Where would we be?
Would you hold me
Would you see I'm afraid 

At the bottom of this pit
I'm screaming for these answers
Wanting the world to hear me sing
Wanting to be your everything

But I'm not
And I can't
They won't hear
they won't ask

This song I sing
My everything
Not a single person will ever hear
Not a single person would ever care

In this circle of lies
Of tears
Of hurt
Of loneliness 

I think I will forever hide
I think I will never be seen
I think no one will ever care
I think no one will ever hear my screams

But if someone asked me to sing
If someone took the time 
And if someone wanted everyone to hear
I would love them as mine


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© 2013 marie



Author's Note

marie
okey doke:) me and my boyfriend are having a write off dont ask how this got started its a loooonnnng story:) (not really but i'm just ot lazy to explain lol) so if you would be so kind as to read this review it and then spam all your writers cafe buddies i would absolutely love you guys!!:) thank you so much:) oh!! before i forget this out of anxiousness to read his piece, could you go to his as well and do the same, his account is sir joseph, and the piece is inquiry:) again thank you for reading:)

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Oooh a sweet poem! It was very lovely:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

really?:) well i'm glad you think so:) thanks for the review:)
How many write offs have you guys had?

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

just this one, how do you think its going so far?:)
Ashley G.

4 Years Ago

I haven't read his yet...or have I? I don't remember! :(
Great vulnerability in this.

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much:) I'm glad you liked it:)
marie

4 Years Ago

and as no surprise, Sir Joseph wins:)
I love your poem but honestly I like your boyfriends better... Sorry :(
You did great though! :D

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

and as no surprise, Sir Joseph wins
StayAnchored

4 Years Ago

Awesome! But you did amazing too :)
marie

4 Years Ago

Thanks:)
I have read this poem as well as the poem by Sir Joseph, and I cannot place my favorite. They sound like the same poem from different sides of the spectrum. It is much like a perfect duet, if I may.

My vote is cast, I believe neither should have first nor second. These are two parts of the same work, in my opinion.

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

and as no surprise Sir Joseph wins
Ethale Captor

4 Years Ago

He did?
marie

4 Years Ago

Yes he did:)
Love it! Very moving!:) you basically told me this before then always followed with and thats why i love you as mine:) you are an amazing poet and girl and if people would just hear and see and care like i have and still do, they would be amazed:) great poem marie! You are definitely gonna win lol:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Sir Joseph

4 Years Ago

Huh? Lol
marie

4 Years Ago

exactly:) lol....the only old word i got left is hog swallow...
Sir Joseph

4 Years Ago

darn oh well we fanagled this enough lol :)

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