goodbye

goodbye

A Story by marie
"

had a good friend die 4/18/13

"
cloudy vision
oceans fall
i can't breathe
help me i call

another life fallen
to that horrible drink
laughing brown eyes
on the pavement sink

one mans decision
stole your breath
countless hearts broken
in heaven you rest

God look down here
grant me this favor
wrap me in your arms
your love i will savor



© 2013 marie



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Beautifully worded!
The poem flows all over you and washes you away in it's entirety..
Keep sharing :) Thanks

Posted 1 Year Ago


I am sorry. Shes in a better place. May you find comfort in his embrace.

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

Its a hurt yes but i know i will see him again
It is always so hard when you lose someone youtruly care about and love. Especially when it was something tragic they went through. My heart goes out to you and I am sorry for your loss.
The poem was beautiful.

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

thank you
Losing someone you love is really heartbreaking. But then we have to stop and pray, that we may bear all the pains it brought us, and wish her/him to be on His loving arms.

May he/she rest in peace...

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

john is resting in heaven now, of that i have no doubt, you are absolutely right about the prayer th.. read more
(cont)>>> I know they would be happy they have such a focused bygone rememberance as most people really don't know what to say to the spark or blasts made amongst people a thousand and one dawns that inflame the memory lanes for every yesterday they wished would wake, for just one sombers say. It's such a crazy messed up world these days :(. God bless and sorry for the long 3 part review but that's what I got out of It. Keep It up.
-Brandon

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

again thank you for the amazing reviews, though they really are worth reading, thank you for reading.. read more
Speakoftherevol

4 Years Ago

Yw my pleasure ;-) actually I should thank you, personal topics to me are THE hardest to give justic.. read more
marie

4 Years Ago

most of the time i write from my own experience, no time to process just the pure raw emotion of tha.. read more
(cont)>> In a naken light, all of the words just dispeirce Into place...given a grave of tragic- beauty- trajected, on rosen dreams and granites dawn on lith solidarity, protection of testimony and purpose shoretold high by your sheen memory; of their life and showing what it can reely mean, no more lucids, which will hopefully now be forever realized, not only In memior as you are the testimony of their unwavering sunkindust touch and the only brutality which will preside Is your hardcore feelings always beating through Infainity silences to be In-balm with solace fluwen, to wherever they may broyale admirashone wraped up t'heir; reign''s love made of you at brightest fairs .

Posted 4 Years Ago


First of all sorry for your loss and for what It's worth may God bless that friend from one struggling believer on this earth to another.. I honestly know no words truly console that type of pain. This poem tribute on the other hand Is exceptional!. It's so simple and pure, yet Intoxicatingly deep In a sea of relative sadness, and leaves me feeling vibes of how much you are unbreakably touched to near numbness love, for a fallen one, all of the peices sure lift the bond you had/have with this person up.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Sorry about your loss, a great tribute...

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

thank you
Oh dear....I'm so sorry...



Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

its alright, not your fault.... thank you though...
a touching write. May his soul rest in peace.

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

thank you
Prritiy

4 Years Ago

most welcome :)

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Tags: death, cry, tears, breathe, drunk, driver, broken, hearts

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