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Paradise

Paradise

A Poem by marie

another day in paradise

another tear falls silently

another broken sacrifice

answering a silent plea


a foggy night in paradise

hides away my fears

warming me as eternal ice

still deep in the years


a lonely night in paradise

another shattered soul

a lost cry in paradise

from a forever hole


and yet he stays

and yet he hears

still he sees 

all the scattered tears

 

he’s calling me

he’s hearing me

keeping me ever near

truly there is nothing to fear


he is here

he’s holding me

holding me in paradise

catching every tear




© 2013 marie



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"he’s calling me

he’s hearing me

keeping me ever near

truly there is nothing to fear"

The safest and most comfortable paradise one can have is wrapped around their loved one's arms.
Great poem.


Posted 3 Years Ago


marie

3 Years Ago

this was written with God in mind:) the best loved one i can have:)
Cool, meow. =3 I liked the -what's it called- comparisons! Like 'Warming me as eternal Ice'. Great job. Looking forward to your next post.

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

3 Years Ago

thanks for the review:)
Great flow, very vivid, like that combination between cold and warm, good and bad...great job

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

3 Years Ago

thanks!:) i'm sorry i've been gone for so long but i'm doing my best to get back on regularly:)
This poem flows really well and I absolutely adore it. I love the imagery! Thanks for sharing such great work. :D

Posted 4 Years Ago


marie

4 Years Ago

Thank YOU for reviewing it!:)
Kuro

4 Years Ago

My pleasure! Your work never ceases to impress me. :D
this is really good, Marie...nice mixture of images, paradoxes and oxymorons to give it a real kick...

well done.

Posted 4 Years Ago



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