Right Before Our Eyes

Right Before Our Eyes

A Poem by Staci Brown
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a new legend is born... a tribute to Josh Hamilton

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Wisps of cotton hung with ease
Upon a palette of Azure ocean
Slowly, quietly, fading into twilight
In total contrast to the field below
This hallowed ground became charged again
    with whispered echoes of men
Who once worked this land
And the electrified cheers of those heard
    round the world this evening

All eyes focused of those able to watch
Ears attentive with radios in hand
We all shared a common bond this night
Men, women, and children
Religions, politics, even wars were swept aside
As we witnessed with labored breath
    and hearts-racing
Right before our eyes
    a new legend being born

Teacher and student reunited
In this new time honored
    midsummer classic
One young man, once fallen from grace
Intent on breaking a record
With a solid pop to the sweet spot
The long ball soared
    thru a humid New York night
Not the subway as hoped
    but 514 feet at the wall

Twenty-eight homers
    with two point three miles of total distance
First round record
A fitting tribute
To a stadium about to be abandoned

I'll never forget this night
Stored with other diamond memories
When I watched one of the greats
Bound for the Hall of Fame
Hitting the long ball...

 


© 2008 Staci Brown



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I love this - Such powerful imagery and word use. You create such beautiful images with your language. The first line, "Wisps of cotton hung with ease / Upon a palette of Azure ocean" immediately set the standards for the beautiful, vivid poem that would follow. I particularly enjoyed the second stanza, and how it focuses on the simplicity of a game, and how even war is pushed aside for it. Great job! (:

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Nice imagery, very well done

Posted 1 Year Ago


You capture well how this new legend unites people. A common bond. All in support of this young man.

Very nice flow.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Great poem

Posted 4 Years Ago


grate poem

Posted 7 Years Ago


I don't know baseball but I can feel the magic of it here. Excellent.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This hallowed ground became charged again
with whispered echoes of men

Very nicely written.
(In the spirit of fairness, I should tell you that I just returned from Boston...
But please don't burn a cross on my lawn, though, okay?)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lovely. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the set up, the imagery is great. It flows very nicely. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How eloquent! You've made this into a masterpiece with all the crisp imagery and nostalgia...truly enjoyed this :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

As much fun and excitement as it was watching it with you, it was even more so reading this tribute that flowed effortlessly from you. Words come so easily to you... I am constantly amazed with every piece you create.

Your words enable even those who weren't witness to this feat get caught up in all the excitement.

I can't wait to see what comes next.

I wish I had that talent.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Staci Brown

Fort Mill, SC



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