Stones and Roses

You kissed me on the tip of my nose,

we swam in icy rivers without any clothes.

You'd dance with me even in silence,

you said, if you were ever rich, you'd buy me diamonds.

We laughed in the midst of pouring rain,

the next day our noses were so stuffed we were in pain.

On Valentine's Day, you gave me many a rose,

and then, you proposed.

Now I lay here, broken and bent,

the earth beneath me wet with tears, my grief spent,

I hug your gravestone and scream to the skies,

I remember being told love never dies.

Lies.

Reviews

[Maan]

Wow. . Tragic. . Beautiful in its own way. Quite and humble manner of putting thoughts together and deliver it through a poem. Very nicely done. . Decent choice of words and imaginations as this can be described in the million other ways but I think you have done it so very nicely.
:) Nice Work, keep writing and keep sharing.

[Emily]

I thought it was nice but a little cliche. Still well written and quick which made it to the point and more effective when hitting the reader with the story. I like it :)

[emrick]

i smiled after reading this though a sad poem. i like this line (you said, if you were ever rich, you'd buy me diamonds.)
i think you are a good poetess.
Nice work.

[Lina Grey]

Tragic, yet beautiful, and simply put. The warm rain of joyous memories falling on the cold caress of death, I'd say. A brilliant tribute to a life loved and lost. Thank you.

[natzky]

whoa...so nice and very heart piercing..:)

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and sad poem. I like how you combine the good memories with the sad ending. memories allow people to live forever in our heart and mind. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[shawlyn]

Hi Sophie,
You are really good at the emotional twist. Imagery, is as usual, brilliant.
Regards
Shawlyn

[Odayin]

Nice intake on the subject. Could really make some prepare better for certain things. This can be taken a few ways though, physically you are correct, but mentally, some might consider the last line to be false. Just really depends on how you look at it. Great feelings and descriptions though.
I like the idea, keep it up

[No Longer in use]

A lovely piece. At first, reader thinks, "Just another love poem!" Then the ending wrenches at reader's heart, and they think, "Now this, this is real life." Not a very constant rhythm, but that's common in free verse. Clever rhymes. Well done!

Kindest regards and best of luck,
Savannah

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

I looove it! Ohmygosh! So good! Excellent! Great! Fantastic! Keep writing!