Domestic Disturbance

The title says it all.

Soemthing is wrong

Deep down

Inside

When a man turns on

The woman and child

 

Something is wrong

Outside

Out there

When eyes become blind

When minds don't care

 

They know it's not right

Skin deep

On show

Wearing the mask

So no one will know

Author's Note

I know it's only one side of a story and that it is not only men that are capable of domestic violence, but I think this covers the majority of cases.

Reviews

[cest la vie]

Spence,
As a victim of domestic violence I thank you for this piece. Though a painful, disturbingread it is reality. Many(like myself) keep the secret and present to society a blissful union. Until one day enough is enough.. I chose to live.. and I'm still standing..
Your voice will educate and make someone think before they lift the arm, voice, tool in anger..
Too many die alittle each day.. just too damn many

Thank you for this piece.. Yes, they it's not right

[brownie]

Covering just one side doesn't mean that it's still not a great poem.
Like others have said though, I like how you carefully balanced the stanzas, making it flow very nicely into the reader's head. Well done!

[Wicahpi]

As a survivor of such atrocities, I can relate to this piece
and wonder why such things have to happen.
Thank you for writing this.

Peace n Light

[Constance-Outspoken]

You did an excellent job with measuring your words out carefully, balancing each line against the next. It flows quite well, and of course it has an excellent message. Nicely done. :)