sometimes

sometimes

A Poem by No.
"

straightforward.

"

sometimes
the things you (don't) say
leave me hanging
off
the
edges
of
question marks.

 

and I wonder:
would you
even want to
kiss
the shells of my
eyelids,
only closed as offerings?

 

did you know that
there are veins
inside?
that my
heart
beats
there
too?


© 2009 No.



Author's Note

No.
I don't usually write poetry with line breaks.

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Simple yet touching! An Honest voice to ur thoughts!!

Posted 2 Months Ago


This is very very true. And also very deep. Wonderful job! I love it and what you did with the title!! Keep up the wonderful work.

Posted 1 Year Ago


I like how you did the line breaks in the first paragraph. It really highlights what you wanted to say. Great job! I can't wait to see your more recent stuff.

Posted 1 Year Ago


I really admire the depth in this piece! The way you described things was remarkable.it hurts to know that people forget what parts of us are still alive.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Great poem i love it just the way it is even the break stuff is cool

Posted 1 Year Ago


Fragile and human. This was a really sweet, sensitive write.

Posted 2 Years Ago


I really like this! The uncertainty and angst comes through beautifully. The line spacing is great, too :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


I really like the simplicity of it. It's like you quietly dropped a bomb :P

Posted 2 Years Ago


I loved the line breaks! They added an effect, I thought it was amazing. With so many simple and short words, you sure made me feel something. Great job!

Posted 3 Years Ago


simple yet elegant !!!!! It has indeed the deeper feelings expressed!!!Nice one!!!

Posted 3 Years Ago



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Added on December 22, 2009
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Tags: unrequited, love, want, ache, long distance, relationship, feeling, passion, God this hurts so much

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