sometimes

straightforward.

sometimes
the things you (don't) say
leave me hanging
off
the
edges
of
question marks.

 

and I wonder:
would you
even want to
kiss
the shells of my
eyelids,
only closed as offerings?

 

did you know that
there are veins
inside?
that my
heart
beats
there
too?

Reviews

[Sourodip]

Unique and at its best.....

[...]

I want to tell you that I love this poem in an original way, but I'm not sure there is one. So I'm just going to say:

I. Love. This. Poem. :]

[DespondentDreamer]

continue on.. good stuff and captivating structure...

[Ashley]

Question is spelt wrong. I love the stylism and rhyme. The imagery painted in the line "the shells of my eyelids" ect. give the poem originality and depth. well done!

[Luna]

I like it. its really cute and i think the questioning is really good. you are awesome at this style!

[xXx]

OMG .. awesome .. take, took me there .. love this!

[poetic soul]

but i guess u shud try doing it often...its nice!! sounds good...i liked the read...but sounds incomplete..."hanging with question marks" like u said...but well said...

:) Love,
Krishna