sometimes

sometimes

A Poem by No.
"

straightforward.

"

sometimes
the things you (don't) say
leave me hanging
off
the
edges
of
question marks.

 

and I wonder:
would you
even want to
kiss
the shells of my
eyelids,
only closed as offerings?

 

did you know that
there are veins
inside?
that my
heart
beats
there
too?


© 2009 No.



Author's Note

No.
I don't usually write poetry with line breaks.

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I like the shortness and the way you simply expressed such strong feelings, I really love this poem

Posted 3 Years Ago


Unique and at its best.....

Posted 5 Years Ago


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I want to tell you that I love this poem in an original way, but I'm not sure there is one. So I'm just going to say:

I. Love. This. Poem. :]

Posted 7 Years Ago


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ZeN
continue on.. good stuff and captivating structure...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Question is spelt wrong. I love the stylism and rhyme. The imagery painted in the line "the shells of my eyelids" ect. give the poem originality and depth. well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I like it. its really cute and i think the questioning is really good. you are awesome at this style!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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OMG .. awesome .. take, took me there .. love this!

Posted 7 Years Ago


but i guess u shud try doing it often...its nice!! sounds good...i liked the read...but sounds incomplete..."hanging with question marks" like u said...but well said...

:) Love,
Krishna

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on December 22, 2009
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Tags: unrequited, love, want, ache, long distance, relationship, feeling, passion, God this hurts so much

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