Natural Disaster

11-21-10

The time, it is upon us,
As we begin to cry
We'd argue, yell and cuss,
A piece of me just died
We used to stand and laugh together,
Hold hands and even kiss
What happened to quickly kill forever,
An explosion of damage that did destroy bliss
The smashing of our love,
The waves we have ridden suddenly deem
Tearing us apart from below and above,
Why the hell has this torn us at the seams??
Volcanic rupture of emotions left splattered,
As there is not much left to pick up from the burns that are smothered
What everyone used to call "WE" is now tattered,
A natural disaster of epic proportions yet we still manage to love one another.

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

Been there and still kind of living it. Long story. Great emotion in this poem. I think later when the emotion is settled a little more with some tweaking you can make this piece brilliant. I love how you compare this to a natural disaster. When we are going through this kind of situation in "our reality" it is a natural disaster affecting every area of our life.

[Desert Dreamer]

Relationships often have parallels with nature, like this one with a natural disaster. I smiled at the ending.

[Robyn]

I like the flow of this piece...
i think this must have been a therapeutic write more than one for an audience, but that is just my opinion.

[StacyPerry]

I checked this one off the "I write like" site and it told me this one would be Stephen King....lol

[Zackery Alan Daley]

Has a southern rhyming pattern, which flows nicely with the either natural coming or researched paradoxes and shape of speech. Reminds me of some great Southern writers, even some local poets. Very beautiful, let anyone who calls southern people hicks read this piece and be shocked into a state of utter unbelief and awe. HAHA

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the logic of this poem. A natural disaster is a good way to describe the walls falling in a relationship. Great story and description in this poem. The last line is amazing. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote