Inner Turmoil

Contest: Inverse Haiku

 

 

 

They all say: "Just be yourself."

Too bad I can't be...

Lost inside my darkest thoughts

Author's Note

Inverse haiku, 7-5-7. Not sure if I like it....

Reviews

[deleted]

I like this. Often, I find myself epitomizing the character of this poem. Good read!

[An owl on the moon]

Very moving, insightful piece. You take just a few words in form and create a whole world of possibilities!

[Babbette Francis]

Very good writing for some one who isn't sure if they like the form. Nicely said. I like this.

[Crazy Cat Man]

Yessss you can just be yourself
Unleash your fury
The world deserves your vengeance

:)

[Dimensija]

Cheer up! But I completely understand these feelings, yes, even though we want to sink, even if it's what we want to do the most, it seems undoable, impossible, something/someone just won't let us go - but, hey, isn't that good, even though it seems it isn't.
Thanks for this piece! ;)

[Bud]

I don't know anything about this type of form or any for that matter. LOL But I do know words...this is Outstanding in it's whole. Those few words say extremely more than what appears. I totally like this poem. Excellent!

[Jon Gary Frost]

Like the format or not, this is a really good inverse haiku. Good conflict presentation.

I liked it!!

---Jon

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Thats is sad but true... wonderful write, being able to say so much in those few lines takes talent and you are loaded with it.

[Fairy Tales]

very cool, but sad too