Summer Nights

This has been my summer (sortof).

Another summer day is spent.

 

The pools are abandoned,

Midday laughter has long since faded

And the kids have cleared the streets.

 

Now teenagers take the sunset as their cue

to start their nightly adventures,

make a memory or two.

(I've made a lot of memories this summer.)

They pile into their cars and blast that summer music,

driving aimlessly but with purpose-

to make this night last.

(They never last long enough.)

 

 

 

Tonight I'm not among them.

 

I'm on the other side of summer nights.

 

Sitting here in my plaid shorts

I got last summer from Kohl's

and an oversized sweatshirt,

loose hair blowing in the wind from the AC.

 

Curled up on the couch with a bag of Funyons

 

watching the newest episode

of Degrassi (again).

 

And I'll talk this summer night away

(if anyone not partying signs on).

 

Tomorrow's another day

that will lead to another warm night.

It's been quite the nocturnal summer...

 

And one I'll never forget. 

 

(Too bad I can't find my camera...)

 

 

Author's Note

Just something for this summer. (Plus it's actually what I did tonight!) :p And sorry if the formatting is weird or the font is all different....the editor won't work with mr tonight.

Reviews

[JordanAnthony]

Yeah, I really like this poem. I loved how instead of trying to make it all fancy and eye-appealing, you just came right out with it, how it really was. I loved it, I think that makes the reader feel like they can connect with the poem even more.
I really like the part that says "If anyone not partying signs on"
I'm not quite sure, but I can assume you don't party?
Same here, good for you. :]

[deleted]

The summer (the days of our lives period) is always a story to tell. You described a version of it so well. I love the flow of this poem. It was very intriguing. Excellent read! I hope you find your camera lol.

[William Usry]

I liked this a lot...really showed the divide between children and teenagers. It does seem that we grow more nocturnal as we get older...until about our mid-twenties...then it starts, like everything else, back toward where we started.

Great piece.

[Andrew'sWonderland]

Wow! Another great write that is quite relatable!!

[Eagle Cruagh]

You probably saw this as a nothing night, but
to me it was small town America.
I have seen them from coast to coast and the
evenings are all the same.
You have captured the feel and smell of the
dieing day. The teens attempting to catch a
piece of life before the night erases their
existence.
Your ring side seat to this panorama of life has
been so brilliantly expressed in this writing that
it is hard to believe the reader is not actually
there.

Beautiful !

My rating ----- 100 %

------ Eagle Cruagh

[deeps]

This is such a wonderful write here
I can see you having such a wonderful time.
This is very well written

[TeenRomance]

Aww, such a great poem! I enjoyed the summer 'laziness' of it, and the little things that gave it personality (like the Kohl shorts, funyons...) :-P I especially loved the last sentence. One of my faves I've read.

[Alexander Z. Anthony]

Haha, sounds like me! None of my friends like to party =( lol
I liked it! Except, it only applies to up where you are, down here, you sweat even at night!
But seriously, nice poem. I liked the part about the cars, "aimlessly but with purpose," soooo true.
Kudos!

[Taylor H]

this was a cute poem. full of imagery and a great way to sum up your summer

[Requs]

If only things that we desire never ended, or never got old.
You got your point across.
Thumbs up
~maTTie