Cloaked Conscious

Cloaked Conscious


You see the old woman

All weathered and worn

Digging in the garbage

Looking for something warm



You think of your home

Then get in your car

Smile to your self

Thinking, you have come far



She pushes her cart

Back out of the breeze

Deep into the ally

Where nobody see's



You drive away slowly

With her out of sight

Your conscious cloaked

For one more night



She lays out her cardboard

To make her a bed

Getting out of the wind

Pulling her coat, over her head



You pull into your drive

And go on inside

Think to your self

It’s good, to be alive



Down the dark ally

The north wind blows

Under a pile of cardboard

She is shivering cold



You turn on the news

The weatherman, points to snow

You think in the morning

Your car will be cold



Pulling out half a burger

She had found tonight

A slight smile on her face

Supper, is going to be nice



Going to your warm bed

You toss and turn

Images, of the old woman

In your mind, are burned



Driving back to the place

You left, your conscious at

Searching for the old woman

Who sits haunting your back



Finding, a cardboard hut

Recognize, the tattered coat

You move to her slowly

In the driving cold



Her weathered worn face

Passed away with a smile

Her frail body, cold and stiff

Has been dead for a while



Kneeling, you cry softly

Knowing, you didn’t do right

And wondering, how many others

Would die, this cold and dreary night



Sometimes our conscious hides

Under cloaks of success

If we don’t lift the cloak

We will drown, in our own distress
 
 
 
Stephen 

Reviews

[Stefano Segnan]

Powerful indeed. The picture and emotions you described impress themselves easily thanks to the easy structure you employed. The rhythm (do not confuse with rhyme) is really good and it helps in attaining the tragic in the story and you did a great work in developing the story and the inner and outward struggles.

[Willard Wells]

Excellent work. Concept, flow and imagery all within this piece. Thought provoking and true also.