The Mysterious Man

A young girl meets up with the man of her dreams!

 

Monday was the first time I saw him

He walked into the crowded room

I spotted him right away

His dark blue eyes felt like they were alluring me to come to him

 

 

 

Tuesday he came into the grocery store where I worked

I prayed he would come to my check out lane

but he went through the express lane instood!

 

Wednesday I woke up in a funk

Why was I acting like this?

I didn't even know him,

but I felt peaceful when he was near

 

Thursday I went for a walk in the park

He was sitting on a bench by  the pond

I headed toward him, but heard my name

When I turned back, he was gone

 

 

Friday I stayed in bed all day

When I slept I saw his face

Something about him was  surreal

 

 

Saturday I decided to go to a party

My heart was breaking, he never showed up

I drank too much, trying to drown my sorrow

When I left I knew I shouldn't drive, but I did!

 

 

Sunday I awoke in the hospital

I felt a presence in my room

I looked beside my bed, it was him!

He was bright and shiny

I felt at peace

"Don't be afraid," he said.

"I'm your angel of death!"

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

wow, I knew after the Wed who he was! I like this one very much!

[Samuel Dickens]

What a shock that ending is. You had me believing the poem was about romance, and then.....whack! Now I'm hoping the girl recovers and meets a really great fellow who'll give her some nice dreams.
"express lane unstood"--Did you mean to say "instead"?

[Goodbye]

What a great story - your poetic form is just improving and improving all the time! And also a cautionary tale - excellent. You should hawk this to high schools to give out to the kids - I'm not kidding!

[iamcarolfierce]

"Sunday I awoke in the hospital

I felt a presence in my room

I looked beside my bed, it was him!

He was bright and shiny

I felt at peace

"Don't be afraid," he said.

"I'm your angel of death!"

This lines made my hair stood up. Pretty amazing! Never thought that this poem would end up with such a twist. Like it! :)

[Dark Aeris]

I drinked too much should be I "drank" too much.
Other than that good write!

[Ron]

Good twist that is born from a slice of depression!! Good.

[Misty Blue Eyes]

WOW this is really crafty.. i couldn have done it better if i tried.. i love this one from you

[Liza]

i appreciate the order in your write but also the element of surprise and suspense.

[My Fair Lady]

It had me captured all the way through and the end created a thought provoking stir. Nice. Is drinked too much right?

[youngwriter222]

WONDERFUL! The ending was great!!!! I never thought that it would turn out like the end, good job keeping my mind wondering about what this guy was going to do.