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Someone Elses Body

Someone Elses Body

A Poem by storiestotell

Shortage of energy,

she feels fake, useless.

The gateway to peace is locked,

the key wont work.

Tears of emptiness stain her face.

She's trapped inside herself.


Maintaining balance is difficult.

Her body is stiff, doesn't feel like hers.

She feels like a mannequin,

unable to think clearly.

Glossy sad eyes, dark and gloomy stare into space.

Her sanity is no longer there.

She's lost inside herself.


Strings being pulled,

makes her feel like a marionette.

All sense of direction is gone.

Mood swings shadow her every move.

Her feet feel like miry clay,

firmly stuck in despair.

She's buried inside herself.


Everyday is like a masquerade party.

She wears a new mask daily,

no one notices her.

Cries of no return keep her company.

She feels her only alternative is death.

She's drowning inside herself.


She sits in her padded room,

strait jacket on.

There's no survival mode left.


She's trapped,

she's lost,

she's buried alive,

she's drowning.


She welcomes death.

The end......

If only she wasn't trapped.

© 2011 storiestotell

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A well written poem about a terrible way to feel...we should embrace our body rahter than distance ourselves from it.

Posted 7 Years Ago

This piece struck certain cords within me... Not overly pleasant cords, but cords nonetheless. Anyhow, the underlying tone of despair walked well with the overall picture it painted. Good work!

Posted 7 Years Ago

Sometimes we can't just break out of ourselves - and you capture this feeling of hopelessness with good effect...

Posted 7 Years Ago

I think it is great, the way she changes from a Mannequin, to a marionette, etc. When she finaly becomes alive, all she wants is death. Glad I read this for sure!!!

Posted 7 Years Ago

Ouch. Insanity from depression. Depression feeds upon itself, and you truly captured that here! Great work! But I think the word 'energy' is misspelled... :)

Posted 7 Years Ago

Amazing, a very relate-able piece. Descriptive and powerful. Well done

Posted 7 Years Ago

this is great outstanding job :)

Posted 7 Years Ago

Wow, very nice. I can really relate to this, I feel some of these same feelings daily.
This is one of my favorite pieces from you.

Posted 7 Years Ago

I think this is a very vivid description of depression and its sad affects on the human Psyche. It pulls you so deep into emotional darkness and real pain, until death seems a peaceful release. You captured it well in this. Well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago

deep death and depression poem. I could feel her feeling, she's flowing with time as each event throws her around. powerful words

Posted 7 Years Ago

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Added on February 22, 2011
Last Updated on March 22, 2011
Tags: trapped, lost, drowning, buried



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