The Rubber Duckie

Limerick for the Epitome of Randomness competitions

There was once and old rubber duck,

Who was out and down on his luck.

For a sweaty, sweaty man,

Decided to take a bath with ham.

So the duck thought, “What the…?”

 

Author's Note

Obviously, the elipses is meant to be cluck... ;)

Please be honest, as with all my reviews :)

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Nah not my favourite. I am into doing different things as it helps you to develop but if this were mine I would craft it thus:
There once was an old rubber duck,
Who was down and out on his luck.
For a rotund, young girl,
thought she'ld give him a whirl
and damn if he didn't get stuck!

Only changed the sex as I could not get anything to snap to 'man'

[Strawberry]

Ha, this made me laugh. Thanks for the feedback.

[Strawberry]

Woop. My original won the contest.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha well done!

[Just Kim]

Too cute, really enjoyed

[Amy Azra Dean]

"ham" was a surprising word but then i guess it makes you think what the duck is going to do now , haha, I thought it was lighthearted and fun. Sometimes things do not have to a make sense, keep writing :)

[Strawberry]

Ta very much :)

[T. Val]

I like this concerpt, but I was lost when "ham" made an appearance. Short and sweet. Well done.

[Strawberry]

Thanks. It was an entry for the Epitome of Randomness competition - hence went for the random ham.

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~ hahahaha... the ultimate ode to wtf... in my humble opinion...of course... ~ you remind me of ogden nash... who is a favourite of mine... ~ excellent work... :)

[Strawberry]

Thanks for the kind words! I'll look him up :)

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~ you're very welcome... i'm sure you won't be disappointed... he once rhymed the word "drunk" with the word "thunk" (which he invented to denote the past tense of the word "think")... :)