A Poem by Archangel Gabriel

A Ghazal inspired by Leslie



Why am I stranded here on earth

when you are below me

caught in a web of powerful control?

Why can I not reach out

and hold you; touch your face,

when you are so close?

What is this force that stands,

like a wall of stone,

between our hearts?

What would it take to break

those beggar’s bonds

of grey steel

and let us join,

as one in unity

in the forest of our love?

He stands over you,

his calloused hand

stifling your screams

as you look to me

and whisper in hushed pain

help me John, take me from this place!



© 2014 Archangel Gabriel

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Delighted you dedicated this to me ; in fact, I know very little about ghazals, this is a better poem than mine and more true to the spirit of the original than I managed. Excellent.

Posted 4 Years Ago

Archangel Gabriel

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much Leslie but you did inspire my interest in this genre with another of your brillian.. read more
Alright, all I know about this form of poetry is what you told me earlier, I always go for the feel anyway, and the 'forest of our love' spoke volumes to me as did your White Knight redemption here. Always that damn wall getting in the way, enjoyed it Gabriel.

Posted 4 Years Ago

Archangel Gabriel

4 Years Ago

Thank you my Lady glad you get the genre! lol
I like this one a lot, and it has a "damsel in distress" feel, but somehow I feel pity for the rescuer ... A good write. As to these formats, I have to say, I do not remember nor do I research forms of poetry. I write 'em and read 'em and take 'em as they come -- every once in a while I write prose, think I might have tried sonnets at some point, and that is about it, so I will take your word on how it's supposed to be.

Posted 4 Years Ago

Archangel Gabriel

4 Years Ago

Ha blame Leslie he made me feel ignorant so I looked up the style and thought it worth a try. Thanks.. read more

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Added on February 5, 2014
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Archangel Gabriel
Archangel Gabriel

Halden, Norway

I am just normal. trying my hand at writing and hoping to make friends. more..


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