The One Who Seeks The Dark

Anyone who's ever known a person who's suffering but refuses help might relate to this poem.

I find thee collecting shadows of an abyss

Placing brick by brick before the singular escape

And your clawing, desperate hands

Clutch my collar and tug down hysterically

But the light burns your frail hands

And so you let go.

You shriek and hiss for relief, for aid,

And pierce the ignorant ears of many.

Those fair people send down a rope

And you clamp your hands upon it.

The rays of hope burn and blind your tragedy

And so you lash and bury

Those who were kind at all.

Author's Note

"thee" (is that correct?)

Reviews

[Lizardo]

This is a very interesting piece you have here
''You shriek and hiss for relief, for aid,
And pierce the ignorant ears of many.''
This one great poem, Thank you for sharing this good poem

[Liv]

Thank you!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

I thought it was awesome.
Really cool. Keep up the great work!
(Please read my story called The Blonde Girl. It's about my best friend who passed. I think you would like it a lot.)
Keep on writing!

C. Lee Battaglia

[Liv]

Thank you, and I did! Its really good!

[Gee]

Hi Liv,I'm rubbish at reviewing but IMHO You have started far to many lines with" and".
3rdline start with your
6th-causing you to let go
8th-piercing.
Perhaps a couple of the others too.
Nice poem based on a good ides

[Liv]

You're definitely not rubbish at reviewing, that's some good criticism. I was actually thinking the same thing when I wrote it but decided that the Ands are so that the poem flows along a little easier and for affect, so I stuck with them. Thanks you though!

[Gee]

You are welcome

[cre]

I think 'thee' is singular for 'me' .. but the beauty of poetry is you get to use that open ended licence;) Really enjoyed the momentum gathered here, particuarly the last line.. well done.

[Liv]

Thanks so much!

[S.J]

I rather liked it. Great Job! Thee does mean you by the way. (just thought I would say that). I really enjoyed it. :)