Venus of Dementia

Gotta love the ones that come out of nowhere!

 

 

Dark hair cascading down,

The sinister side

Of the goddess of seduction

Comes roaring to the foreground.

She walks the night readily,

Awakening the lustful wishes

Lying hidden in the chilled hearts

Of her midnight acolytes.

 

Hold me captive with the rest,

A victim in blissful abandon

To the many enticements

You present to your disciples.

Perfect pearly visage framed

With silken sable hair

Holds all intent and willing,

Servants to your carnal demands.

 

Do not let this temptation end.

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

There is an interesting moment, in this piece, that transition between the two bodies. You begin with an almost objective view of her, as an onlooker - reporting upon her. Then you are held captive by her, along with the rest. It is almost as if, any that would lay eyes upon here would become enthralled victims of all her desires... that transition, sealed the deal for me on this piece. An elegant write...

[Jack Frost]

love it man ;P

[Jaclyn]

Sexy, smooth, elegant, haunting. You know I love you! LOL

[Ignorance Was Bliss Eve..]

Hmmm Lust my fave deadly sin. =)
I like this alot. Dark sided.
Nice work.

[darkgurl]

A sensual write here very well written i like this piece...Kim

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Great Write!!!
Kudos!!

[~amanda~]

super cool! i love the imagery your poetry provokes. its so dark and seductive. the ending line is very powerful. well done!

[FoolsGold23]

Potent, man, potent indeed, haha, this out of nowhere? gracious, where's that muse when I need it? just kidding, this is an elegant and suspenseful piece, (Reminded me of something Leah would write for some odd reason) great work!~P

[Jennifer Ryan]

Very sensual. You imagery was vivid although you mentioned her hair twice. I would have liked to have seen a little more description on more of her.