Deliverance

Bullying IS BAD

You know the saying...

death knocking at my door,

Well death was certainly knocking at her door

It wasn't even her fault...

This agony she was feeling

Brought on by her piers

scary even in her peaceful dreaming 

Begging and pleading to be let out

Crying soberly then angry shouts

Why were they doing this to her 

She had but kept to herself

she bothered no one.....

NEVER asked for help!

But still they came laughing 

mocking her appearance

And their she STILL stood crying 

For god's deliverance...

Her Home was no HOME

It was more like her hell hole.

So that day when death came knocking at her door

SHE WAS GLAD

You hear that glad!

Glad she had found a way out.

No more screaming and being locked out.

So there she stood....

Traumatized having no feeling

watching the big thing chasing for her meaning.

BAM her body flew

eyes looked and heads turned

Finally she was getting the attention she deserved.

And  there she layed with a smile on face. Getting her diliverance

REST IN PEACE ALL THOSE WHO HAVE SUFFERED DUE TO BULLYING 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Astro]

This is a very imaginative and thought provoking poem Xena, that's age appropriate for someone like yourself but adult enough in 'deliverance' to capture the minds of readers much older. The idea that you can put the horror of being bullied to death over night is uplifting. For some as they grow up it may very well feel that way, sadly for others they remain targets for close-minded people. There are a couple of spelling mistakes that I found should you wish to clean them up.
"piers" should be "peers" and "And their she STILL stood crying" where "their" should be "there"
Keep up the good work.

[Onku Ghosh]

Through your poem you have narrated a story.....a sad story. You are so young and you already write so well. I can see the makings of a big writer already.Very good write. Keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Xena the soon to be 9th grader]

Thank you for your good comment!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a very good writer. The poem told a sad story. We must do our best to stop story and lies. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Xena the soon to be 9th grader]

Thank you..I'm glad you enjoyed. i just wanted to reach out to those who have been in simular situations.!

[Oddly]

Wow< i've been looking at your writing and you have some really good pieces. i love the way you say that the girl needs her diliverance and when death came she was glad. THat is so inronic because no one else would think that. Thans for repping the people whho have suffered due to bullying. My friend was in a simular situation.

[Xena the soon to be 9th grader]

AW shucks thank you so much! And Thanks For you review on my other writings! Hope To Hear back from ya. BYE NOW!