Story From Bermuda Triangle

“Pa, why don’t we live in a wide land like the one which our geography teacher taught us about “… His dad looked at him in wonder and asked: “which land?”… Jimmy gazed into his father’s eyes and with a voice full of curiosity he said: “earth, have you heard about it ?”, His dad stared at his son with confusion and with his husky old voice he said :”son, we live in the nowhere for those who live in earth”.. Jimmy’s eyes widened with worry, he said in a low voice: “what do you mean pa?”… his mother barged into the room and said:”Noah, he is old enough… we can do it now…”… Noah replied with a whispering voice :”I think you are right, Mandy”… Mandy set the fireplace and got some fruits for her husband Noah and her 17 year old son, Jimmy, while Noah was getting some old pictures Jimmy asked his mother:” what does my father mean ?”, Mandy took a deep breath before answering Jimmy’s question by saying:” Me and your dad will clear everything up just wait until he comes..”…

Moments later, Noah came holding with his old hands the picture, he sat down, and started telling his son:” Jimmy, that story was years ago, when me and your mother where in college, she was that beautiful girl whom everyone wishes to have a glance from her, I kept watching her for 3 years, when I decided to take an action, I took a deep breath and came closer, I felt like a loser for starting this way ..” Mandy interrupted him by a kiss after saying: “you were never foolish, you were taking the right way …”, Noah smiled and proceeded :”She was beautiful just like now, I still remember the first word that I said to her “pizzas or burgers, you, me , launch, today. Choose now..” ,but your mother was very tough, when all what she did was punishing me on the face, but still I smiled, because I knew at that moment that she is the girl I really want to have… I kept chasing her, days, and days, she used to live in that gigantic mesmerizing blue house, they had a gaudy back yard, I thought at first that they were having a part, but then after visiting it few times, I realized that’s how they kept it, and she was her daddy’s princess, she was the pivot of that house, and I was “that guy” at school, but one Friday night Mandy was going to a movie with her ladies, I heard the girls talking that day ,so I decided to go there, they were watching a girly movie, but I kept recalling to myself that I must do that for love and for her, after the movie was done, she was standing alone in the street ,under the rain, she was gorgeous my son, she was mesmirsing ,that young Bronte under the rain, I was … trapped in the cages of her beauty, at that moment I decided to make my second move, I walked by her and whispered in her ear, “pizza, burgers or a hot coffee”, she smiled at me, I was drawn to my knees at that moment, and my heart was pumping louder than any time, because SHE SMILED…she agreed for a cup of coffee, and the first words  she uttered in that cold night:” I know you are following me..”, I was embarrassed son, really I was, and at that night I told her how much I loved her… and we kept talking until the middle of the night, when she went home, I sat there, and started to think, how can I make her mine? Without taking away all what she have now?, I love her… , moths passed by ,when me and that aristocratic lady started to live “our kind of childhood”, the kind of childhood that is away from those velvet dress and the white ponies, the childhood that is dipped in the mud and the river jumping not the private pool ones, that lady was a child between my arms and a velvet dress in her parents eyes, she was like the Canary between the Eagles, her parents started to realize how different she is turning to be, and they knew that I was the reason, so her father invited me for dinner, and for the first time, I entered that gigantic house, it was full of servants and many statues that held her name “Mandy”… I was in love my son, but her father hated me to bones, he warned me at that day to stay away from his daughter, I couldn’t agree, because I knew she was my lover, 1 month passed with us apart, then Mandy and I decided to elope, so we took her father’s private plane, and while we were sailing, we were trapped, that plane started falling down, we didn’t know what to do, but all what we did was held each other so tight, with our hands together and our lips on a date, and all what I remember the next thing I saw was a yellow sky and those blue trees, I thought it was heaven, but then I saw people around looking at us, when a man called Isaac said:” welcome to the land of lost ones..”, I knew at that time that I will have Mandy with me forever, but I didn’t knew where is that forever and are we in this forever land !!!....they took us to this same house, we believed something was wrong, I took Mandy for a walk to find our eternal land ,but nothing, we were trapped in the nowhere, this land had no computers and no electronics, it was like the old ages, days later we decided to live, enjoy our life without wasting our times searching for it, so we got married , years passed with happiness and the most amazing life here, the love and the care that was given my Mandy was worth everything, we were sitting there at the shore looking at the Gulls, and dreaming together, when an old man came to us and said “do you know what is this place called “, we said yeah its earth…!, he said:” no.. It’s not, it’s what everyone fear to pass through, that’s Bermuda Triangle”. Mandy and I, were shocked, the sea was gray and the sky was yellow, trees were blue and grass was violet, and we still couldn’t believe that.. The man continued talking and said:” here is a place where there are no sins, there is no hater, and we breathe love, we inhale beauty and exhale gleams of love… that’s where everyone fear of… “…. Jimmy interrupted his father and said: so do we believe in the presence  Earth, his father answered :”yes we do believe in it, but Earth denies the presence of us “…

And so, they lived in this area, that was later called “Utopia “.

Author's Note

I know it need more work, but can you note on the grammar mistakes..
and thank you for your time

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

this has a nice mixture of romance and characters that the reader can relate to.. It does have quite a few grammar and spelling mistakes, but as a whole is pretty good.. it was entertaining and kept my interest.. made me wonder if he would go exploring, now that he knows the truth.. nice job.. :)

[jennifer little]

this was a wonderful storie i enjoyed reading it it had great passion and great flow to it keep up the good work and keep writing

[Michael G.]

A very entertaining read. I like where your imagination takes you.

[letmebeme66]

Loved the triangle as it was said before it's in the title but you don't think about it when reading
but one statement you write 'her father's private plane and while we were sailing'
I had a question if it was a plane or a boat
very good

[stars are far]

a plane ,and yeah i used sailing ,its like a metaphore ... because that triangle can take planes too..
thank you for your time

[R Smith]

I love the way you turned it into the Triangle, must admit i was so involved in the story i forgot about the title so the Triangle came as a complete surprise and a very pleasant one, especially when you maned it Utopia which i've always associated that with some green sunny land in the Himalayers somewhere, that linking was smooth and made me wish to be there too, very well written Suhad :)

[stars are far]

Thank you very much ,. your words really made me smile.. that was so shocking because im new in writing storeis.. thank you

[R Smith]

you did well, just the odd spelling mistake which i see i managed in the review (should be named not maned lol )

[stars are far]

hehe its okay i understood it, and i do have mistakes in this writing so its totally fine :)

[Rana]

The idea behind this is great and the story is sweet. There are grammatical errors. A few: "me and your dad will" should be "your dad and I will", "holding with his old hands.." should be "holding in his old hands.." launch should be lunch and punishing maybe should be punching "she is the girl I really want to have" should be "she was the girl I really wanted to have"

[stars are far]

thank you very much :)I will correct them

[hardeep sabharwal]

Entertaining, though there are a few mistakes,, but it is an interesting read, written in a nice way,
thankyou for sharing