Devil’s Door

Devil’s Door

Counting my days by my hands

With tears falling hardly

like rain in a winter day

Trying to forget your touch

And your hands

That were moving on her lips

And ignoring your voice

That was calling her ...

 

I was dying over here

My heart melt

Like river between the hands of mountains

And my soul was yearning

Like a desert

that is running out of sand ...

 

All of that

You with her

Alone all night

I was looking at you

Like  I was a star

Landing on the high sky

And you were that "everyone"....

 

That hole in the devils door

What made me see

The killing truth

That i was ignoring

And trying to cover my eyes

Over it ...

 

I'm sure you love her

She does too

But :"I ADORE YOU"

This is why

I will let you go with her

Just to see your smile

And feel your laughs

 

Boy.. Take Care !!!

 

Before you go

Take my heart

And draw a smile on your tomb

Reviews

[White-Inked Pen]

I enjoyed the creativity in this.. telling the story that has been written millions of times in a new concept.. "Devil's Door"

"I was looking at you
Like I was a star
Landing on the high sky
And you were that "everyone"....



That hole in the devils door
What made me see
The killing truth
That i was ignoring
And trying to cover my eyes
Over it ..."

Interesting..

[Tai]

Beautifully written work, such clever word positioning and the imagery of this is wonderful. Brilliant work, amazing, it's hard to put this into words. My favourite part would be the second stanza, it is a wonderfully written part, and how you compare your soul to a desert is amazing. Great work!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Wow....this is so amazing....letting one's desires/wishes/hopes/loves go to another, very altruistic..... top work this is...brilliance xD

[EMF]

Dman. It's been a while since I read your work, but what a change. A passionate, powerful piece. Absolutley breathtaking. A superb write.

[Chris G. Vaillancourt]

This is like a breath of fresh air that one experiences after being confined to a room with no ventilation. Great work

[Lily Mae]

Very passionate..I felt as if I had climbed right into each word.. excellent write...xxx

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WOW! Now this one is awesome!
i totally loved this write,
So very nicely done.