Everything Go Away Easily !

Everything Go Away Easily !

 

You  promised to always be here

And make this life taste as cream

But now you left this home 

Without a simple alert or a clue..

 

You didn’t respect my feelings

You just made me your own ear rings

And left me without saying a word

Just ignoring me, and this was my award..

 

You just went in your own way

Not try to look at me and try to say

A sorry word or even a hey

You just got what you want and then flied away .

 

But man ..I cried over you

I once begged you

But now I’m over  you

So never think that YOU are something to me …

Reviews

[emman]

I liked the last stanza.. :)

[AK]

Wow! I just realised all your poems are so emotional and true! Keep writing! I love them all!

[Stone.]

Nice poem :)

[paradise]

Very well done ! I really ewnjoyed this once again!

[Bidu Ibrahim]

Getting the real taste of betrayal! Emotionally packed

[Emma Cathryn]

It's a great poem, but I think you're trying a little too hard to rhyme. Otherwise, I love the positive ending and how they came back strong! ^.~

[AriaxNasies]

I think that the poem could be a little more structured. At times it seems like you're going for a rhyme scheme and then you lose it again.
The concept behind this poem is definitely a good one, and I do enjoy the emotion of the piece.
But I feel like there's a few things that could be cleaned up, such as meter and diction.
A more sophisticated word choice would bring more impact to the poem and add to its effect.

[khalid]

it is good in feelings and nicely expressed but there are some mistakes i should tell you about or i wouldn't be honest...like, everything goes not go, just ignored, not trying, what you wanted, flew. nice poem though

[Becky Clancy]

I certainly enjoyed this poem alot ^_^b

[Tai]

Beautiful, well-expressed poem :) Once again, you have made a great poem, keep it up!