The Power Of Love
A Book by Sunflower 20
 the story of the unexpected power of young love  © 2011 Sunflower 20
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Please be critical, but try to ignore grammer and punctuation errors. I tend to lose my self when writing. :)
P.S just remember that this was intended as a short story, not a book. So if the chapters are a bit uneven, its because they weren't meant to be chapters. I only did that to make it easier to read, instead of having to scroll down all the time.
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I am usually not into mhussy love stories (as I like to call them) But This one was different the way you went form line to line paragrapgh to paragraph it was amazing, you used a very descriptive vioce in your writing that made the main character so real seeming, you grow attached to her and it ends so nicely. nothing bad to say keep it up you obviously have a passion for writing that I share with you.
Posted 13 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Great written story! Nice job
Posted 12 Years Ago
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I am usually not into mhussy love stories (as I like to call them) But This one was different the way you went form line to line paragrapgh to paragraph it was amazing, you used a very descriptive vioce in your writing that made the main character so real seeming, you grow attached to her and it ends so nicely. nothing bad to say keep it up you obviously have a passion for writing that I share with you.
Posted 13 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Oh my gosh !! Such a lovely, lovely story. I am awestruck... This is really a GREAT job. Wonderfully poised from start to finish, great language and such a sweet, perfect love story. I so like the idea of using the italicized lines in between to describe her unconsciousness. And the way you wrapped up the story, in the last few lines, Despair, Accident, Darkness and final reunion, Wonderful.
Sunflower , from what I've read in this one, you have a natural talent to write..Just keep going..I am sure you will be doing great..
Posted 13 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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such a well written story. Enjoyable plot left me hanging on from paragraph to paragraph. I didn't really see anything wrong with it. Well writte.
Posted 13 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Added on November 30, 2010
Last Updated on January 20, 2011
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Sunflower 20Melbourne, Australia
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I'm a 15 year old young writer who absolutely loves reading and writing. My stories have been praised by teachers, friends and family but I would really like someone to critically edit and give me fee.. more..
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