Ideal Heaven

A writer's IDEAL of what her HEAVEN would be.

Ideal Heaven

oh i am so sleepy

and yet i can not sleep.

 

The moon is up

and so am i.

 

There are too many thoughts,

too many hopes,

and too many wishes

for me to lazily dream.

 

There is not enough time

yet it seems so slow

when your awake with the stars.

 

So i sit

and somberly write

a poetic verse

about sleep..

 

and i begin to dream

of an Ire-land.

 

An open field.

A shady tree.

A soft rolling hill.

...

And you and me.

 

We would lay there all day

in an ideal heaven

created from a dream.

 

Reviews

[Gheeneil]

Dreaming awake will always lead us to such place. The ire-land thing confuses me though. Did you really mean ire-land or ireland? If you meant the latter, there would be irony in it. But these conflicting thoughts would make this piece mysterious and powerful as well. There's just more to it.

[The Reticent Receptioni..]

this reminds me of the poems i used to write when i first graduated high school. I remember feeling *just* *like* *that*
beautifully written!

[Wildecat]

Very nice free form writing, a total pleasure to read your poetry.

[James Ci]

very nice :] it reminds me a lot of Yeats. i like that you write free form but its not difficult to read