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A Poem by Justin D
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This was a short writing descibing the hardships of those we leave out. Based on past experiences. Enjoy

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Imagine being the one in the back of the room
not the one who screws around in class
but the one who sits in the back.
As not to be addressed
as not to be looked at
talked to, or even acknowledged.
Not because of your own choices
but because your unique qualities aren’t accepted.
As time passes
you move on with not the want of acceptance
but the wish of the end.
You are by yourself in the world.
No one to follow.
No one to learn from.
Your decisions are your own.
How do you move forward?
Solitude envelopes those who accept it
For none the truth shall be told
long as evil resides in the heart.
After solitude is accepted

fear is no longer a daily chore
thoughts of love and peace
become those of anger and hatred.
Cursing those who deny you
and holding grudges against those who call you different.
You hide in your own mind
surrounded my darkness and lies.
Not knowing who to trust
you distance yourself from others.
You do not wish to admit it
but in the back of your mind
your inner self cries out.
Wishing that in this lifetime someone
anyone,
who feels your pain will be with you
through and through.
Until then, you must move forward
protecting yourself from others
and protecting yourself from you.
You must find your own reason to push on.
The question i find hardest to answer is,
what do you do when you fear one thing,
not fear of falling asleep and being in darkness,
but falling asleep and fearing to wake up?

© 2009 Justin D


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Ahh, what a tale! It's sad to know that we don't always see people's hurt, but that we walk right on by as if they didn't exist. I could feel the emotion in this piece, and I hope things work out for you!

But: "surrounded my darkness and lies." Did you mean "by?"

This was a really great poem. Keep on writing!
~Lauren


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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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this is some great work. It points out that not every one is accepted, those who call you different are the same as you. no one is the same.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow you are a very skilled writer. You really do connect with the reader. I understood everything you wrote about (from the writing and personal experience). Great job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem hits deep at home for me. I am exactly as the poem describes down to the last detail. I really love how you are able to capture the true reason why some seek solitude and how it really feels, bravo!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ahh, what a tale! It's sad to know that we don't always see people's hurt, but that we walk right on by as if they didn't exist. I could feel the emotion in this piece, and I hope things work out for you!

But: "surrounded my darkness and lies." Did you mean "by?"

This was a really great poem. Keep on writing!
~Lauren


Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Reminds me of how I used to be, I know how it feels, maybe not as bad as others have had it, but I can still understand where this is coming from on a large scale. This is also another wonderful piece by you, keep writing and never stop! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You truly "truly tell it like it is". To be rejected and sometimes with rejection comes cutting remarks, either direct or overheard. No matter the source they cut deeply. It is human nature to try to hide from or nuetralize emotional pain. "If I come in at the last minute, sit very quietly and do nothing to cause one of them to notice me, I can make it through this." It is easier to tolerate the silence and stay emotionally in the dark. That is "safe haven." But to have to be in the open and have others forced to acknowledge your existence is like standing in the center of a stage and having a bright spotlight put on you, with no supporting cast, no script and a very unfriendly audience. Society is a cruel instructor in human relationships. You have a gift as a writer. Use it and keep the words flowing, you will find yourself well received here.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Although I generally feel those that are alone choose to be so as opposed to being forced into it, I'm glad to see that at least at some point, by being here if no where else, you chose to fight against it at least a little bit. I hope it has helped.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was an amazing piece. It is so hard at times to see people for who they are. We at times do not see the "quiet" pain of people and the way they suffer alone. Excellent piece.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i can see what kind of writer you are. you summarize your life into your poetry! you are a true poet and I'm glad that I reviewed this work of art. the only thing is that it needs better word choice, when I say that, I mean not big words that people cant understand, like more imagery.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You just summarized my life... lol...

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