Midnight escape

dream land...

When our dreams are hanging on a star

midnight adventures, they're never far,

Come step outside of reality

travel this midnight, escape with me!

Sail the seas through a billowy mist

and be lured to lands, you can't resist.

See Irish eyes that radiate smiles

a maritime thread throughout the Isles.

There are shooting stars to light your way

everlasting love will surely stay.

While our hands embrace on mountain peaksl

icy crystals melt upon our cheeks!

We gently sway to this midnight dance

erase from mind, our circumstance.

On this myst'ry ride, our worlds collide

and welcome relief's found by your side.

Our eyes enchanted by all we see

dispell the shadows and we are free.

But our midnight dreams they cannot end

When hearts are held in each other's hand.

Stepping back through reality's door

divine intervention, we wish for.

Again to hang dreams upon a star

more midnight adventures, never far!

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Cool to see where it started. I see your ability to write in meter has improved from here to there, where, I was before. Your style is evident all the way back here too. Back in this time zone. Or so this time traveler knows.

I am hung up on the one word. 'Relief's'. Wondering what it possesses?

[Susan 🦋]

omg! I need to re-work this..... way before I knew what I was doing.lol

[Susan 🦋]

reliefs is a typo!

[Richard🖌]

Kibitzing!
Not a typo in its usage … relief's the conjunction for "relief is".

[Susan 🦋]

Thanks Richard!

[William Michael Reeves]

Now I see it. Thanks for redirecting my brain. Needs it sometimes.

[Susan 🦋]

Oh my goodness! This is one of my first poems ever written.. Thank you so much for reading and leaving such a sweet review! I promise to make my way over to your page very soon.

[Einstein Noodle]

beautiful ..not much experienced with forms but this has natural rhythms in the iambs and language that is used in everyday speech .. so easy to betray syntax for rhyme or save syntax and stretch and cliche' rhymes ... i especially am drawn by the invitation to join and experience first had the dream .. such a sweet place for lovers and romance .. seems the lovers awaken with a prayer for the dreams of the day .. i think that's fantastic ... no better way to begin says i! thanks for sharing, Susan!
E.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A lovely piece. Personally I avoid rhyming poetry because I cannot trust myself to force rhyme and thus detract from meaning and emotion and flow. Tis a skill for sure. Nice piece Susan.

[Susan 🦋]

:-) One of my first poems ever written! Glad you enjoyed this one.

[Tate Morgan]

I loved this as i am so attracted to Ireland. As well as the 9,9,9,9 meter.

[Susan 🦋]

One of the first poems I ever wrote!...thanks for the review! Much appreciated.

[Tate Morgan]

rhyme and meter are to me the musical beat of every poem

[Susan 🦋]

:-) yep...only I just learned them.

[Nicholas Shea]

I adore this. Absolute magic!!

[Tony]

I like how you interwove the dream imagery with the romance imagery-- yes, dreams can come true when you are spending time with that special person 👍 I also enjoyed the lyrical quality with the couplets 👍

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you so much for your wonderful review!!

[Tony]

My pleasure-- have a great labor day weekend👍

[Susan 🦋]

you too :-)

[Tomás Ó C..]

That's real poetry! A treat for adults and children alike!

[Susan 🦋]

Too sweet! thank you for reading and the review! Much appreciated

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Susan! : )
Your personal touches of "your", "our", "we", "each other's", etc; and what a sweet invitation to "Come … escape with me!" through all the enchanting metaphors, nuances, and moments you've painted into the warmest desires and dreams a mind can hold and effulgently enjoy, are virtually irresistible to the senses of any warm-blooded romantic (like me, for instance). ; )
Truthfully, this is so well stroked and caressed with imagery and delightful emotional captivation, I felt my imagination joining you in this sensationally suggestive rendering of sheer wonder and beauty … your pen speaks of much to be gleaned from a heart, mind, and spirit that knows what poetic-voice means to those of us whom can interpret and enjoy the crux of your enthrallment.
Grammatically adept, the embrace of your skills are amazingly stirring to receive!

I love it, Susan … big hug of thanks to you for such lovely pleasures shared! ⁓ Richard ;; )

[Susan 🦋]

You my friend are too sweet!! this was my first attempt to write in meter! LOL...never knew there was such a thing!...hahaha I'm pretty proud of this one!!! thanks so much for the wonderful review... BYW trying a Sonnet next...

[Richard🖌]

Oh-BOY!
Sonnet, the Rolls Royce of poetry!
Which form of Sonnet are you going to try?
I can't wait … be sure to let me know if you need help, or anything, for that matter! : )

[Susan 🦋]

Italian petrarchan sonnet....oh boy!!!!

[Richard🖌]

That's a good choice, Susan, and an apt challenge for even the experienced poet … my favorite is the English [Shakespearean] Sonnet.
Let me know when your is posted and I'll read and review it for you, okay? : )

[Richard🖌]

I have a number of English Sonnets on here, if you'd like some examples to study-up on.

[emmajoy]

'While our hands embrace on mountain peaks -- -- cy crystals melt upon our cheeks! '

People say that waking each morning is the most wonderful gift, and, for sure, that couldn't be truer

However, night is a gift each of us deserve. an open door into where, perhaps, we long to be.. and
your beautiful poem says just that. Tis beautiful and, written so finely, each stanza having a.. character of its own.

This is such a pleasure to read just before sleeping. Thank you.