The Solitary World

Nothing exists better than this world ...

Immensely beneath the Sun's core,
squinted the lanes of melancholy,
immensely beneath the Moon's core,
glimpsed the mirage of milky ways,sheerly phony,
immensely beneath the Earth's core,
peeked the solemn netherworld,genuinely doomy,
immensely beneath the Black hole's core,
noticed the grievously recurring agony,
immensely beneath the Heart's core,
fathomed the esthetic elation,beyond the Acme..

Reviews

[Noodlehead]

I loved the structure of this write, I think it was really well written. I loved the how you coloured each stanza with a different colour. :) It was really good. :)

[KAOlmsted]

Clever. I like the Heart stanza the best in a work I thoroughly enjoyed. Thanks so much for sharing it with us, Swapz ;-)

[Swapz747]

Thank you so much for reviewing and rating..
Your review uplifted my interest towards poetry.. :)

[KAOlmsted]

Not for nothing, but if a review has to uplift your interest, you're doing this (writing) for the wrong reason. I have been writing for some 30 years and only the past two have been on writerscafe...I write to please myself, and so should you...if you need to rely on reviews to keep you motivated, I have to question your motivation ;-)

Always my pleasure...you are so welcome, my friend.

[Swapz747]

Yes, I also write to relieve my pain,rage and everything that is held from long time..i write for my own pleasure.. Perhaps,its a long story .. :)
I just feel good to share my writing with all of you..

[KAOlmsted]

PM me with the long story...mine is a shoulder upon which many have cried...I am here if you need a friend.

[Swapz747]

Yeah will tell you someday :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Sun, Moon, Earth... Heart. We are all "Star Stuff"... I like the implications of this piece.

[Swapz747]

Thank you again friend :)

[Rogue]

I was good and going right along with you until I got to this word "Acme"
Wait.. What? How did Wile E. Coyote fit into all of this? I am stumped.
I laughed, but still stumped. Was it supposed to be another word? Or were you going for a lighthearted ending?

[Swapz747]

Lol.. Hope you liked it ! :)

[Rogue]

-smile-

I know it also means peak or best.. But my mind went straight to that Coyote strapping on a rocket pack with the word ACME stamped on it. :D

Interesting word use. :)

[Swapz747]

That was really hilarious what you thought !! :-D Thank you for an interesting review.. ;-)

[K.C. Zbryk]

I love how you cycled through the celestial bodies and applied this to each of them eding on humanity. I think this is a brilliant and unique piece of poetry, and the change in color added to the differences in each stanza. Great work!

[joshua deathdealer]

I love this.. I like the color change and your wordplay. Well done.

[Amila Jay]

Immensely beneath the heart's core
Fathomed the esthetic elation, beyond the Acme

A powerful write, superb:-)

[WhiteWillow]

Earth and heart, belong together, which everything else revolves around (or so we should have all believe). Short, poignant, a wonderful write!

[imagination101]

Strong vocabulary and metophors enrich this talented piece of art!