The 'Girl in Black Top'

...it was no particular day, love happens over a period. Though I saw this girl everyday, I don't know how it all happened and one day things changed....for her, making me fall in love. Do I get her?

This one is for the girl of my dream,

Real or not but this is what I feel,

May it come true once in my life,

And let the girl be my wife! 

 

 

"Every morning at the start of my day,

 Ur name is the first dat my lips say,

 Happy and smiling I move out of bed,

 To strive and paint the world red.

 

 

 Ask me the reason I love U for,

 Silent u'll find me to be,

 Not that i have none,

 But there are thousands to choose from.

 

 

 Fresh is the memory of our first meet,

 When I was shy but you were sweet,

 Our talks were short and pauses long,

 Wasn't it odd for friends so old?

 

 

 Pleasure it was at such high,

 Wish it never bade a forever good-bye,

 Memories are the only thing that remains,

 The 'Girl in Black top' has the reins.

 

 

 I don't promise you the pleasures of heaven,

 Ones that are short and easily spent,

 But whatever it is that comes our way,

 Toghether we'll stand to laugh it away.

 

 

 Still waiting for ur reply to come,

 U may change but I won't cos

 I still feel the same that I always did,

 Have loved you and always will."

- Swateek Jena

Author's Note

Please tell me how is my first stint at poetry.. :)

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

This is great! Spelling gets annoying, but maybe that's just me, as I try to use as much correct grammar and spelling as possible. The flow is great, and I liked how you started this out. Yes, you should go for her if you feel that she is the one for you!
This is simply an amazing poem, I do hope you continue to write.

[natzky]

I don't believed it was your first', in fact you write as a professional one...looks like your so in love with that girl....write more

[Ronn Michael Salinas]

*together... other than that, I can say this piece is frank and honest and open. nice one

[Swateek]

Thanks Tai...yup! will surely make sure I write many such... :)