The Cracked Facade

For L. With all my love.

Isolated your heart and muffled your cries

But I've finally found the deceit in your eyes

You live off the "what ifs" you made in your past

And fill up your future with lies you held last

 

Why is a raven like a writing desk?

For the same reason your life is a mess/

The bucket is full but the brim's holding strong

Now go back to your corner and fight with your wrongs.

 

The light, it fades

With passing days

The moon will take all you've known...

 

How tender your skin is made of thinnest lace

If I trace your veins they'll lead back to one place

The strings of your heart are made of finest gold

The music plays stories that you've never told.

 

Alice, oh Alice, why don't you drink me.

I'll make you smaller than I'm able to see

The size of my thumb and then you'll shrink no more

You've forgotten the key, you won't get through the door

 

Just follow me

Leave your mind be

We won't stop till you've grown...

Reviews

[Katelyn]

I usually don't give out reviews unless I have something to say about the piece. I have to say, this was a very deep poem and flowed with creativity. I keep rereading the fourth stanza; it's a very strong stanza and really well written. Keep up the great work. 100/100

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting poem. Left me with desire to know more. I like the skipping through thoughts and hope. A very good ending to the poem. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[selkietales]

That was beautiful :) Especially the fourth stanza.

I'm not sure if this is intentional, but in the first stanza you wrote 'yo' instead of 'you'. Also, it's thinnest, not 'thinest'.
But yeah, otherwise, great poem!

[Cole Hayley]

Beautiful and very gentle. I love the wonderland refreence and you killed that ending. amazing work .

[Destinyxi]

How tender your skin is made of thinest lace
If I trace your veins they'll lead back to one place
The strings of your heart are made of finest gold
The music plays stories that you've never told.

Those lines are really original and creative. This was a lovely read :)

[axel]

anna, you dont seize to amaze me , this is really good stuff,you seem to be more into quotes,thats good, i have something you should read, it called
WE ARE ALL LEADERS, i posted it a few moments ago

[Le parisien]

looks like a beautiful intimate poetic letter to someone struggling,
great job