Enchanted

Like ripples in a silent lake,

You plan my breath to take.

The beats of my heart go on hold

When you stand in my tale untold.

 

Your first touch like a drop of dew

Drops of love that I ought to sew

With golden threads of love endowed

And keep them back in the cache of cloud.

You hoved into as the first rain sight

Gorged in romance and filled with delight.

I looked at my feet when you looked at me

And lost my sighs at the sudden glee.

 

Your shadow wrapped me through

As you came near to me.

How dumb I felt in your cage

When I felt I was totally free.

 

Behind the tree along the lake

You splashed the water on my face.

Kissed all of them and turned me pink

Stole my soul and made a link.

 

An hour spent with you

Is an age with desire.

Where every new wish starts with you

And I find Thee in your attire.

 

I close my eyes where you appear.

Smiling and winking and looking so real.

All I want is to see you forever

And feel how love becomes surreal.

Author's Note

I close my eyes where you appear
Smiling and winking and looking so real.
All I want is to see you forever
And feel how love becomes surreal.

People in love have so much to share and treasure that it feels like a neverending story with chapters of minutest feelings of ultimate pleasure they earn from their beloved.

Reviews

[Arielle Ann]

Behind the tree along the lake
You splashed the water on my face.
Kissed all of them and turned me pink
Stole my soul and made a link...."

In my opinion those were the cutest lines in the whole write...lovely write...emotions such as love can only be felt, so I will not write anything about my feelings after reading this, since you said it all :)

[katyj]

Yes i agree so very poetic and yet so wonderful,
I loved this. So mellow and caring.

[Meghan]

This is very poetic and soothing. You have a great way with words. There are two lines that sound a little awkward to me: "You plan my breath to take" and "When I felt I was totally free"... I think some slight edits could help clarify your meaning. All in all, I like the poem. It has an "enchanting" rhythm. Good work and good luck!